麻煩改英作what makes a good friend

希望可以由英文本科系的人用指考的評分標準幫我做修改,給我各段的建議,結構的部分似乎是我特別弱的地方,麻煩大家囉 :) 題目是:What makes a food friend A good freind can make an dramtic impact on us in many aspects. In my opinion, a good friends should be considerare and intimate.That is to say, he or she should know exactly how I feel and give me emontinal support() when... 顯示更多 希望可以由英文本科系的人用指考的評分標準幫我做修改,給我各段的建議,結構的部分似乎是我特別弱的地方,麻煩大家囉 :)
題目是:What makes a food friend
A good freind can make an dramtic impact on us in many aspects. In my opinion, a good friends should be considerare and intimate.That is to say, he or she should know exactly how I feel and give me emontinal support() when I am down. He or she should also remember when my big day is and celebare it with me. Furthermore, he or she needs to be intimate with me. By this, I mean that we not only share up and downs in life, but keep each others' company frequently.
I think that a good friend influences us positively. Take my best friend, Megan, for intsance. She stands by me whenever I am in a bad mood, seeing my through those difficult times. She is not good at expressing herself, however, I can still feel her care about me.Even if we are not going to the same school, we are in correspondence every week. Through the letters, both of us have the courage to move on. I'm lucky to meet a freind like Megan. I believe if we are willing to take the intiative in caring about others , we will all be blessed with a blossom freinds.
更新: 我覺得不大有回答到我的問題耶
我是希望幫我檢查結構上有沒有什麼問題或是可以多說明什麼
基本上我是有列大綱的
1.先提出了好朋友的條件 再闡述這些特質
2.第二段舉出例子 我覺得我提到的特質有盡量呼應到前段所提認為重要的特質
然後第二段倒數第二行打錯了 是seeing me through
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