DZ 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 1 0 年前

英文自寫文章修正(文法、用詞)

各位大大好:

因為要報告寫了一份小講稿文

題目為"music for life"

寫的方向為音樂有很多範疇,而大家也常聽音樂

但是音樂卻存在著一般人不了解的治療功能(舉了例)

最後引導到不論你有無以上病痛,只要想享受當下,紓發情緒,

那便開啟你的播放器徜徉在音樂世界中吧!

 

但小弟英文不甚精明

希望能幫忙挑出文法或用詞上的錯誤訂正

可以的話幫我增減一些句子讓文章更完整或充份!

萬分感謝!

 

以下為內文:

 

MUSIC is closely linked with our daily life: the language we speak, the voice we sound, the sound from nature, of course, a song we sing. Anyone of these could be called MUSIC.

 

Naturally, we called MISIC in general, indicate to jass, r&b, rock & roll or other else we play in our player.

 

Everyone has his own favorite type of music, it may be pop music, country music, may be classic music or dance music.

 

BUT do u know -- music has some characters make it enable to become a good and effective treatment tool?

 

Music can immediate influence person's intrinsic sentiment; music can make someone get satisfy with the feeling of beauty; Music can induce a person's motive power.

 

Some studies in America pointed out that: Mozart's music make cows milk better, and his String Quartets can comforts the pedestrians, reduces the accident. Even a nursery rhyme can treat senile dementia, the Appassionata Sonata of Beethoven can treat sick headache.

 

It’s AMAZING! Even though I never try one of these treatment of music, I still think music really can treat your heart, your mind. Some kind of music can make you relax, some kind of music make you feel happier, some kind of music help you release from the bad mood.

 

So, do you have headache? Do you feel upset? Or you’re very happy and just want to shake your body?

 

Just turn on your player and enjoy the world of music !

  

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  • 1 0 年前
    最佳解答

    Music is an art form whose medium is sound. Music is closely associated with our daily life: the language we speak, the

    voice we hear, natural sound, and of course, a song we sing are considered forms of music.

     

    Usually, what we call music in general refers to jazz, rhythm and blues(R&B), rock 'n' roll and so on, which are classified as performing arts.

     

    Every individual has different tastes in music, such as pop music, country music, classical music and dance

    music.

     

    But do you know what features make music a good and effective therapy?

     

    Music can directly influence one's innermost feelings and emotions profoundly. It relaxes and soothes your mind and even makes you feel at ease and satisfied by creating a particular ambiance to suit your mood.

     

    Studies in America indicate a clear link between music therapy and stress relief. Take, for example, Mozart's music proved effective in making cows to produce milk

    better. The researchers discovered that each dairy crow's milk yield rose by 3% (approximately 0.73 litres) a day when slow music, rather than fast music, was played. They believe relaxing music can improve milk yield, probably because it reduces stress. This adds to evidence that relaxing music relieves stress in animals as well as people. Also, it has been proven that his String Quartets comforted the pedestrians, reducing road accidents. Other intriguing findings include a nursery rhyme

    treated senile dementia and the Beethoven's Appassionata Sonata treated

    headaches.

     

    It’s simply amazing! I've never tried any of

    the music therapies above, but I believe music carries many health benefits. Some music relaxes you, makes you feel happier, and some even puts you in an excellent mood.

     

    In short, it's beyond dispute that listening to music does wonders to alleviate stress. For this reason, and from today onwards, whatever situations in which you have a headache, you feel distressed, or you're so happy that you feel like shaking your body out of a sudden impulse, just flick the switch on and enjoy listening whenever you like!

    注解:

    1. closely associated = closed linked,close 与 closely 皆是副詞,但 close 是指靠近地,而 closely 則是密切地,這裡 closely 後邊接形容詞或是過去分詞,非 V+ing

    2. daily life (日常生活) 是慣用詞語,能在詞典裏找到,life 無需複數化

    3. 古典音樂是 classical music,classic 指的是典範的

    4. milk,動詞,是指擠奶,不是產奶

    5. headache 是可數名詞,前邊應當有冠詞

    參考資料: 自己+時事
  • 1 0 年前

    Music is closely linking with our daily life lives ,the languages we speak, the voices we sound, the sounds from Nature, of course, a the songs we sing, Anyone any of those could be called Music.

     

    Naturally Normally, what we called Music in general, always indicate to jazz, R&B, Rock & Roll or other else, which we enjoy often in play in our player.

     

    Everyone has his own personal favorite type of music, it may be pop music, country music, may be classic music or dancing music.

     

    But do you know that music has some characters that make it enable become a good and effective treatment tool?

     

    Music can immediately influence person's intrinsic sentiment, music can make someone get be satisfied with the feeling of beauty Music can and induce a person's motive internal power.

     

    Some studies in America pointed out that Mozart's music could make cows milk better, and his String Quartets can could comfort the pedestrians to reduces the accident. Even a nursery rhyme can could treat senile dementia, the Appassionata Sonata of Beethoven can could treat sick headache.

     

    It’s AMAZING! Even though I never try one any of these treatments of music, I still think music can really can treat your heart and your mind. Some kinds of music can make you relax, some kind of music make you feel happier and some kind of music help you release from the a bad mood.

     

    So, do no matter you have headache, Do you feel upset? or you’re very so happy and just as to want to shake your body?, just turn on your player and enjoy the world of music the music of the world!

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