Japan 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 10 年前

請幫忙修改短篇作文─ ”Types of students”

Be a student is one of sections in everyone of life. There are many types of stidents as we know. They can be divide into three types: bad students, normal students, and good students.

The first type, bad students, include often absent in class, do not do homeworks, and cheat on exams. We know that they are bad habits, however, we still can see the conditions in every school.

Secondly, normal students, include chat in class, go to class late, and do homework late. Sometimes, we could make the mistakes on our school of life. Actually, we can choose what we want to be right now.

Finally, good students are good examples, include go to class on time, give assignments on time, and do good attitude. They are not difficult doing right if we are hardworking.

To sum up, many people go to work, than come back to school. Therefore, they will cherish their shool of life.

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  • 10 年前
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    (Being a student is a part of everyone's life. [*1) And the types of students can be organized into three categories, bad, normal, and good students.[*2] )

    *1好像少了些,兩句英文不夠順暢

    *2 這樣寫不夠吸引人,可以用 比較生動的字眼,像是 mischievous, mediocre, and know-it-all…)

    The first type, bad students, include often absent in class, do not do homeworks, and cheat on exams. We know that they are bad habits, however, we still can see the conditions in every school.

    (First, the definition of bad students includes frequent absences in class, delinquent homework assignments, and cheating on exams. These behavioral problems are what define bad students; however, they still exist in every school.)

    Secondly, normal students, include chat in class, go to class late, and do homework late. Sometimes, we could make the mistakes on our school of life. Actually, we can choose what we want to be right now.

    (The next type is normal students. Habits includes chatting in class, being late to class, and turning in homework late. These are mistakes almost everyone made during many years of schooling. (*3) (*4) In fact, these mistakes can be enlightened and avoided. )

    *3 你寫了學生們的錯誤,可是你沒寫這些錯誤會怎樣,可以寫說會從上課遲到,養成上班遲到的習慣,等等…

    *4 we 在這裡指的是誰,沒有任何道理,寫這種文章最好是從頭到尾第3人稱。

    Finally, good students are good examples, include go to class on time, give assignments on time, and do good attitude. They are not difficult doing right if we are hardworking.*5

    (The last one is the good students. Their good examples includes being in class on time, turning in assignments on schedule, and good attitudes toward learning. These students advances through hard work. )

    *5 完全不通的一句話

    To sum up, many people go to work, than come back to school. Therefore, they will cherish their school of life.

    (The point is, many working people have decided to go back to school. Needless to say, it’s much more difficult that way. So anyone should not waste their golden opportunity of education during their school years. )

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