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Surfing internet is a common thing which most people do everyday. The different types of web are full of diverse commercialism. Some people don' like ad and ignore it, _however_, others may feel curious and browse it. When we start the IE and enter the homepage like Yahoo or PChome, we can see a lot of advertisement which propagandize for games, activities, goods and so on. _According to_ these commercialisms, people are often attracted by the item which they interest and browse the subject. Most large web has sponsors,and it will propagandize their goods by commercialisms._ On the other hand_, some webs don't have sponsors, they have enough fund to work their server.

Some people complain that the commercialism is too much in the internet. _In contrast_,some people need to propagandize the item for their business. _Although_the internet are full of commercialisms, we can just notice the one we interest.

請問是否有何處用字不當或是不順,麻煩請給小弟點意見吧!

或者有更好的寫法也請指教!

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    Surfing internet is a common thing which most peopledo everyday. The different types of web are full of diverse commercialsism(建議使用”商業廣告”commercial 一字). Some people don't like ad and ignore it, _however_, others may feel curious and browse it. When we start the IE and enter the homepage websites like Yahoo or PChome, we can see a lot of advertisements commercials which propagandize for games, activities, goods and so on. _According to_ From these commercialisms, people are often attracted by the items in which they have interests and browse the subject contents of them. Most large websites has possess sponsors, and it they will still propagandize their goods by commercialisms._ On the other hand_, some websites don't have any sponsors, but they have enough fund to work offer their server services.(讓伺服器運作應不是重點)

    Some people complain that the commercialism is too much many in the internet. _In contrast_, some people need it to propagandize the items for of their business. _Although_the internets are full of commercialisms, we can just notice the one that attracts us we interest.

    (propagandize 意為試圖說服他人相信自己不同的意見,據字典解釋,似多用於政治上的宣傳,商業上的多用advertise,或許其它書籍有不同說法,請再查)

    (據以前英文老師的解說,靜態的廣告如海報、報紙、雜誌等用 advertisement, 動態的如電視、收音機等用commercial, 而如internet 的廣告似應屬於動態廣告,我覺得應使用commercial)

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