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G1: Happy happy . I am so happy.
G2…Yes, we are too.
G1: What a beautiful day.
G2….Yes, a beautiful day.
G全: Hello everybody. We are pretty girls 
G全.:Nice to meet you~
G1: Hey~ how about taking a break there?
G2: N~ I am so tried.
G3: Ok! Let’s go.

B1 : Blue blue sky. Green green tree. Red red flower.
B2 : Boss~ Do you want to take a rest?
B1 : N~ok!
B3: Boss~ Do you want to a cigar?
B1: Fine.
B4: Boss~ Do you want some coffee?
B1: Good!
B5 : Boss~ Do you want a massage
B1 : Wonderful.


C1: Yo yo yo~ Hi~ everybody body look at me.
C2…. Look at you.
C1: ________ _________ is my name.
C2…..Your, your, your name.
C1: Money, money is my toy.
C2…. Your, your, your toy.
C1: Open your eyes and watch me shin.
C2….shin la la ~ shin la la


B1: You!
C1: You!
B1: Do you know it’s my place.
B2….Yes,  our place.
C1: No~no~no!  It’s my park.
C2….Yes, our park.

G1: Hi~ It’s almost in the time. We have ready go home right now.
G2…Yes, let’s go.
B1: Hi~ my name is _____
C1: Hi~ my name is ______
B1&C1: Nice to meet you.
G1: Well~ you should give me a big present.
   And you can be our friend.
B1&C1: Deal. I can to be.
B1: That’s well be me.
C1: Are you kidding, that should be me.


記者 : Good evening, this is ***TV News. I am reporter   ***** .   
 This evening, there is going to be a big fight in the park. Let’s go and to look.

警: Are you fighting?
All : No sir.
警: Show me your id card.
All: Yes sir.
警: Remember don’t fight in the park.
All: Yes sir. Goodbye sir.
C&B: It’s not finish.



警: Are you fighting?
All : No sir.
警: It’s too late to go home now.
All : Yes, sir.

美女: Don’t fight please.
     We can be friend all together.
     And it’s a happy ending right.
其他: Yes, we can play all together now.

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G1: Happy happy . I am so happy.
G2…Yes, we are too.
G1: What a beautiful day !
 G2….Yes, a beautiful day.
G全: Hello, everybody. We are pretty girls 
G全.:Nice to meet you~
G1: Hey~ how about taking a break there?
G2: Mm~ I am so tried.
G3: Ok! Let’s go.

B1 : Blue blue sky. Green green trees. Red red flowers.
B2 : Boss~ Do you want to take a rest?
B1 : Mm~ok!
B3: Boss~ Do you want X a cigar?
B1: Fine.
B4: Boss~ Do you want some coffee?
B1: Good!
B5 : Boss~ Do you want a massage
B1 : Wonderful.

C1: Yo yo yo~ Hi~ everybody body look at me.
C2…. Look at you.
C1: ________ _________ is my name.
C2…..Your, your, your name.
C1: Money, money is my toy.
C2…. Your, your, your toy.
C1: Open your eyes and watch me shine.
C2….shin la la ~ shin la la

B1: You!
C1: You!
B1: Do you know it’s my place.
B2….Yes, our place.
C1: No~no~no! It’s my park.
C2….Yes, our park.
(X:表示去掉字)
 G1: Hi~ It’s almost XX time. We are ready go home right now.
G2…Yes, let’s go.
B1: Hi~ my name is _____
C1: Hi~ my name is ______
B1&C1: Nice to meet you.
G1: Well~ you should give me a big present.
And you can be our friend.
B1&C1: Deal(Sure比較好). I can X be your friend .
B1: That  will be me.
C1: Are you kidding, that should be me.

記者 : Good evening, this is ***TV News. This is   reporter ***** . 
This evening, there is XXX a big fight in the park. Let’s go and take a look.

警: Are you fighting?
All : No ,sir.
警: Show me your ID.
All: Yes sir.
警: Remember not to  fight in the park.
All: Yes ,sir. Goodbye sir.
C&B: It’s not finished.

警: Are you fighting?
All : No, sir.
警: It’s too late to go home now.
All : Yes, sir.

美女: Don’t fight, please.
We can be friends all together.
And it’s a happy ending right?
其他: Yes, we can all play  together now.

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