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題目:Nancy學校周六不用上課,但他上週六擺了個烏龍。

Nancy is a student. She wake up at7:30 last Saturday. And she forget today is weekend in a hurry. She just worried about late for school. She went to school by bus. Finally she arrived the school. When she went to her classroom, she found out there is no people. She just remembered today is Saturday.

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  • 1 0 年前
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    題目:Nancy學校周六不用上課,但他上週六擺了個烏龍。

    Nancy is a student, she woke up at 7:30 last Saturday, and she forgot today that day is was weekend, so she was in a hurry and She just worried about being late for school. She went to school by bus ran to get on a bus, finally she arrived at the school. When she went to stepped into her classroom, she found out there is no people no body in there, then she just suddenly remembered today is that day was Saturday.1. 過去的某天,應寫為 that day, today不合宜。2. she went to school by bus 她搭公車去學校,文法上正確,但對描述她的緊張情形,似有點”平述”,未表現出急忙的情境,因此改為 she ran to get on a bus, 她跑去搭上一輛公車。3. she went to school 後又 she went to classroom 敘述方式重複,而應對於後之”發現教室無人”,也未敘述出”踏進教室”這一動作,前後句語意的契合及語意表達的強度較弱。4. find out 意思較著重在發現原被隱藏的事物,如是一般的發現只用find 一字即可。

  • Bobby
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    1 0 年前

    1. She woke up at 7.30 last Saturday.

    2. She was worried about being late for school.

    3. She took the bus and finally she arrived at school.

    4. The classroom was empty when she got there, then she realised today is Saturday.

    盡量不要把And 當作句首!!

    第二句跟最後一句類似

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  • 1 0 年前

    She woke up at 7:30 last Saturday.

    And she forget today is weekend in a hurry. ??? 啥意思?

    Finally she arrived at school.

    She is worried about late for school.

    When she went to her classroom, she found out there is no people. She just remembered today is Saturday. -->When she went to her classroom and found no people there , she just remembered today is Saturday.

    那是「台式英文」,建議多看看英文書籍

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