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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 9 年前

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My parents do business in a small way at market. When I was a child, my parents used to teach me that I have to try my best to do everything. Therefore, I had a good attitude toward my life.

I graduated form Department of Applied Foreign Languages. When I was at college, I used to learn foreign languages at the languages corner which is setting up from the school. The listening and speaking skills are my profession. Except for English, I have learned Japanese more than one year. Besides, I also had a part-time job in Creative Arts class, and my job was cleaning the musical instruments and mopping the floors.

I studied in Department of Commercial Management when I was a senior high, and I major in Accounting. I had passed the Examination of level C technician for accounting.

My target is to increase the practical experience for me. If I have the opportunity to get the job, I will do my best for company.

這是為了將來求職用的作業,不知道文法或其他字的用法對不對,想請高手大大幫我檢查檢查~拜託嘍~感謝^^

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  • 9 年前
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    My parents do a small business in a small way at market, When I was a child, my parents used to and they always teach taught me that I have to try my best to do everything when I was a child, Therefore, I had have possessed a good attitude toward my life since then. (將 when I was a child移至句後,讓my parents do a small business 與後句連結,否則語意感覺是一句一句獨立的,對作文而言並不佳)(I had a good attitude…… , 如此的陳述並不合適,因那態度從小到現在都存在著,使用過去式不正確,至少都須使用現在式,但為表達出其從以前至目前都存在,而改使用句型 have pp………since then 由那時起就已經…….)

    I graduated from Department of Applied Foreign Languages. When I was studying at college, I used to learn foreign languages at the languages corner which where(地點用where) is was setting up from by the school. The listening and speaking skills are my professions. Except for English, I have been(have been pp 表”曾經做某事”) learned Japanese for(表期間 for + 期間)more than one year. Besides, I also had a part-time jobin a creative arts class, and my jobwas cleaning the musical instruments and mopping the floors.

    When I was a senior high student, I studied in Department of Commercial Management when I was a senior high, and I (前有I 字,此處 and I 可省略,以使文字簡潔 ,majored 前有逗點)majored in accounting, and I had passed the examination of level c technician for accounting.(前段講述大學求學情形,此段講高校,將when I was a senior high student 提至此段最前,以和前段之文意分開,讓讀者讀此段時,馬上可知道是談論何時期之事)

    My targetis to increase the practical experiences for me. If I have the opportunity to get the job, I will do my best for contribute my efforts to (前已提過try my best, 此處改用其它表達文字) company.

  • Jessie
    Lv 6
    9 年前

    My name is AAA. I graduated from Department of Applied Languages.

    I am good at Egnlish speaking and listening. Except Egnlish I have been

    in the Japanese learning programe for about a year.Also, I used to keep a

    part time job in Creative Arts class. I cleaned the instruments and kept

    things in order. When I was in high school, I studied Accounting in Department of Commercial Management. I passed the level C examination. Therefore,

    I am a certified Accounting Technician ( Book Keeper....I don't know what

    kind of certificate u got...so maybe you should

    say" certificate accounting book keeper).

    My parents run the samll busines in the market. They taught me that I have to

    try my best at what I do. I have borne this on my mind ever since I was a child.

    Now all I need is an opportunity. Then, I will be able to present you the best of

    me.

    I HOPE THIS WILL WORK FOR YOU. I would recommend you to prepare a

    cover letter and a formal resume. If you have resume, u can send it over. I can

    help you with resume critique.

    Normally, you have to furnish your words a little bit. The plain text presentation

    is not really eye catching. Plus, your school projects or extra curriculum can

    give you a boost in resume,too. For sure you have to learn how to puzzle

    out things and put them in order.

  • 9 年前

    你可以試試看這個免費的英文軟體,它會幫你抓出英文造句的錯誤:

    http://eocweb.knowletech.com.tw/common/m_getpage.a...

    參考資料: big learner
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