Japan 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 9 年前

Self-introduction﹝請幫忙修改文法等,唔該﹞

題目:Self-introduction,

請幫忙修改文法等,感謝。

【上台做簡單的自我介紹】

Hello, everyone.

My name is Renee.

I'm from Taipei.

My hobbies are learning Cantonese, Japanese, playing facebook, and watching movies.

And, my idol is Sammi Cheng(鄭秀文). I like her for more than ten years. I went to see her concert at Hong Kong coliseum and Taipei Arena.

When I'm in Hong Kong, I like to take trams, see Victoria view, and eat local food, and more and more.

That's why I love Hong Kong so much.

I am looking forward to going Hong Kong soon.

In addition, my future plan is working in Hong Kong.

Finally, ﹝拿出海報﹞

Have you seen this movie "Totoro" before?

I like this movie which can bring the good old days and memory, when I was child.

Thank you for your listening.

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  • 9 年前
    最佳解答

    希望你喜歡我的修改:

    Hello, everyone.

    My name is Renee.

    I'm from Taipei.

    I like learning Cantonese and Japanese. I also like facebook and movies.

    My favorite artist is Sammi Cheng (鄭秀文). She is my idol. I have been her faithful fan for more than ten years. I have been to her concerts at Hong Kong coliseum and Taipei Arena.

    When I'm in Hong Kong, I love to transport by trams. I enjoy the Victoria view, local food, shopping and much more. That's why I love Hong Kong so much.

    I look forward to visiting Hong Kong soon. If possible, I would like to work in Hong Kong in future.

    Finally, ﹝拿出海報﹞ here is a poster for you to see.

    Have you seen this movie before? The name of this movie is "Totoro" .

    This is a very good movie which has brought back much memories of those good old days, espeically when I was a child. This is my recommendation to you. I hope you like it.

    Thank you for your listening.

    2010-09-30 20:06:11 補充:

    最後一句, 應該是 Thank you.

    2010-10-01 10:34:34 補充:

    一個台北人國立大學畢業至香港工搵份工,難嗎?

    除非你有特別門路或專長, 能進入跨國大機構, 否則是絕對不容易的. 個人覺得現在比較容易進入的是娛樂事業, 如音樂, 化妝, 電視甚至賭場等. 在香港, 我幾乎覺得已由大陸人雄霸了大部份行業及職位.

    參考資料: 自己
  • ?
    Lv 6
    9 年前

    It is well-written. 如這篇英文文章都有錯, 也許是看錯了!

  • 除了串錯了「espeically」之外,我就認為十分好了!

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