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October 24, 2010 Today. My friends and I went to South Sea Park to see the sunrise. To the destination, the scenery is very beautiful, I felt very happy when see the sunrise. I took many pictures, each of photos has a great prospect. The early morning air is very good, and a lot of people were taking a walk, riding the bicycle, walking the dog, fishing, and taking the pictures…etc. I want to say, I really love to see the Sea. Seeing the sea can Stress relief. I cherish the two years of life in Hualien, and my good friends. It lets me that not feel lonely. After, we went to McDonald's eat Hamburgs, and shared feeling tone with everybody. The pressure of schoolwork and missing hometown is our common troubles. Haha, and we also taked about a lot of interesting things.

哈哈...這是作業要寫的...可以幫我修正比較順的句子嗎?感謝

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  • 楓華
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    9 年前
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    My friends and I went sunrise viewing at South Sea Park this morning. The scenery was mesmerizing. It was breath-taking seeing the sunrise. I took many pictures and each photo has great prospect. The air was very fresh and a lot of people were strolling, riding the bicycle, walking the dog, fishing, taking pictures…etc. I want to say that I really love to see the sea. I feel relax and calm by looking at the sea. I cherish the two years of life staying in Hualien and also my friends who keep me accompany all the time After that, we had our breakfast at McDonald's. We had a nice breakfast together by sharing feelings and interesting with each other. We had the same thought that the pressure of schoolwork and homesickness are our common troubles.

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  • 9 年前

    Today,my friends and I went to South Sea Park to see the sunrise. On the way to the destination, the scenery was very beautiful. I felt very happy when seeing the sunrise. I took many pictures, each photos has a great view of scenery. In the early morning, air was fresh, and a lot of people were taking a walk, riding the bicycle, walking the dog, fishing, and taking the pictures…etc.The thing I wanted to say was that I really love to see the Sea. Seeing the sea could relieve my stress. I cherished the two years of life in Hualien, and I also love my good friends who let me not feel lonely.

    After the trip, we went to McDonald's eat Hamburgers, and we shared our feelings with everybody. The pressure of schoolwork and missing our hometown was our common troubles. Haha, we also talked about a lot of interesting things.

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