阿勝 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 10 年前

請幫我看看英文自傳有沒有錯誤

小弟的英文能力實在不好,但找工作又需要英文自傳,因此麻煩英文高手幫我看看有沒有錯誤

My name is XXX,and my parents always tell me to do a job honestly and with dedication.Because I am a responsible person,I will do my best with anything,therefore my friends trust on me and like to work with me.

Although from the very beginning my grade is not very well,but improve little by little.Because I am interest in the financial industry,I take the financial card illuminates examination and pass it four times.

I am friendly, easy going, focus on team work and work well with my colleagues. I am aggressive, hardworking and optimistic. I have a strong sense of accountability and responsibilities and I take all my work seriously through constant learning as well.

中文是

我的名字是XXX,而我的父母總是教導我做事要腳踏實地。也正因為我是個有責任心的人,所以我會盡力的去完成每一件事,因此我的朋友都很信任我也很願意跟我ㄧ起做事。

雖然我的成績一開始並不是很好,但卻逐漸的再進步。因為我對於金融業很有興趣,所以我考取了4張金融證照。

本身的個性隨和、親切、友善,與同事相處融洽,富團隊精神;在待人處事方面,是秉持積極、進取、樂觀的態度;工作態度則相當務實、謹慎並且具有強烈的責任心;也能秉持不斷學習及負責任的態度來從事每份工作。

總覺得第一段跟第二段有點怪怪的,麻煩了解的人幫個忙,謝謝

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  • 10 年前
    最佳解答

    Evil Panda的見解:

    版大, 您其實翻的不差, 我甚至可以給您80分 on grammar, 但翻的有點死版..待我幫您把生命灌進去; 如下:

    My name is XXX,and my parents have always told me to work honestly and with dedication. As (不建議but當開頭) I am a responsible person,I would try my best in anything, and that is why my friends "trust me"(不需on) and like to work with me.

    Although my performance was not ideal in the beginning(grade/grades較適合用在學校成績上),I have improved (有在進步)little by little. As I am interested in the financial industry,I have obtained 4 finance licenses(看了這句冒出三條線, 所以全改了= ='''). I am friendly, easy going, and team work-oriented(最後一個字跟前個字有點類似, 所以幫您刪掉). I am also aggressive(要在不同句子裡延續自我形容時, 最好加 also),hardworking, and optimistic. I have a strong sense of accountability and responsibility(統稱時後面不需加S), and(I可以去掉因為前半段已用過) take my work seriously through constant learning (as well為贅詞, 並不需要).

    重新整理如下:

    My name is XXX,and my parents have always told me to work honestly and with dedication. As I am a responsible person,I would try my best in anything, and that is why my friends trust me and like to work with me.

    Although my performance was not ideal in the beginning, I have improved little by little. As I am interested in the financial industry,I have obtained 4 finance licenses. I am friendly, easy going, and team work-oriented. I am also aggressive, hardworking, and optimistic. I have a strong sense of accountability and responsibility, and take my work seriously through constant learning.

    希望有幫助到您...

    靈活中翻英

    2010-11-09 19:25:30 補充:

    Dear George...how come your words are always intermingled?

    You should have your keyboard checked ^ ^

    參考資料: Evil Panda formerly known as the Panda
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  • 匿名使用者
    10 年前

    我的名字是XXX,而我的父母總是教導我做事要腳踏實地。也正因為我是個有責任心的人,所以我會盡力的去完成每一件事,因此我的朋友都很信任我也很願意跟我ㄧ起做事。雖然我的成績一開始並不是很好,但卻逐漸的再進步。因為我對於金融業很有興趣,所以我考取了4張金融證照。本身的個性隨和、親切、友善,與同事相處融洽,富團隊精神;在待人處事方面,是秉持積極、進取、樂觀的態度;工作態度則相當務實、謹慎並且具有強烈的責任心;也能秉持不斷學習及負責任的態度來從事每份工作。 >> Allow me to introduce myself. Myname is XXX and YY years old.First of all, my parents always tell me towork honestly and with dedication. I’m taught to be a responsible person in my earlyages, so I would try my best in anything, and that is precise of why my friendsalways trust me and like to work with me.Though my performances in the previous jobwere not good enough in the very beginning, it’s been greatly improved eversince. I’m interested in financial Industry as well and through studying hardin my free time, I’ve got four licenses in the field. I’m easy-going, cooperative, and team-spirited.I’m also aggressive, hardworking and optimistic. As well, you could find astrong sense of accountability and responsibility in me as an employee. Finally I’m looking forward to having achance to serve you. ※參考看看 (have fun in learning English)學英文不要怕犯錯,但要常用到若有些字連在一起,請把它再分開。※

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  • 10 年前

    你可以去下面那個部落格看看,他上面有發表很多自傳翻譯、中英履歷及求職求學相關的文章和相關資料,對你的求職翻譯應該滿有幫助!還有一些面談面試的要領以及免費範例,你都可以參考喔!你若有問題也可以發問或是留言!

    部落格網址:http://tw.myblog.yahoo.com/supercanada2007/

    參考資料: 很實用的求職、翻譯部落格
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  • 匿名使用者
    10 年前

    My name is XXX. Growing up, my parents have always taught me the importance of doing a job honestly which resulted in my very responsible personality. As I strive my best to accomplish every single given task, my friends see that about me and are very willing to work with me.

    Although my grades have never been excellent, but it has alway seen improvements year by year. Due to my vast interest in the financial industry, I have acquired 4 financial licensing examination certificates.

    As for myself, I am very easy going, friendly, full of team work spirit and get along with just about anybody. In terms of attitude towards life, I feel that I am very persistent, hardworking and optimistic. I have a strong sense of accountability and responsibilities and I take all my work seriously through constant self growth and learning.

    Hope it helps! It's a pretty good essay to begin with!

    參考資料: 加拿大長大
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  • 10 年前

    Allow me to introduce myself. My name is XXX. I am xxx years old.

    Since I was a little child, I was taught by my parents to do things honestly and seriously. I am taught being a responsible person, so I always fulfill my duty with every effort. My friends trust on me and like to work with me.

    Because I have been interested in Financial Industry, I keep studying hard; and owing to constant studying, I have passed the financial examination and got four licences.

    I am easy going and cooperative, I get along well with people. I am also an aggressive, hardworking and optimistic person. I look forward to having a chance to serve for your company.

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  • 10 年前

    我不太懂啦,不過幫你修改一下grammer

    My name is XXX.My parents always tell me to be honest.As I am responsible,I will do my best with anything,so my friends trust on me and like being with me.

    At the beginning,my grade is not very well but I improve little by little.As I am interest in financial industry,I took 4 financial card certificate examinations and passed.

    I am friendly, easy going, focus on team work and work very well with my colleagues. I am aggressive, hardworking and optimistic. I have strong sense of accountability and responsibilities . I take all my work seriously through consistent learning as well.

    個人建議:若是自傳,應該多寫人生歷程,也應該多寫一些實在一點,可以證明你能力的事跡

    只是建議喔

    不要介意

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