飛小妞 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 10 年前

請幫我找出文法錯誤處 10點

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麻煩各位幫我找出錯誤或不通順處!!

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I have privacy,those who invade this will be punished.

I hate invader.

So I turn the language into English.

You can try to learn my word,but I won't write any secret on my diary anymore.

You won't see anything what you want .

I believe that my English composition will improve a lot.

Today,I have a serious conflict with my mom again.

Although I know that she is really concern about me,but I can't control my bad temper.

Unimaginable...money can make a person like a miser.

真讓人難以相信...錢可以讓一個人這麼吝嗇

Money makes a people who is selfish.

錢讓一個人變的自私

I believe transmigration,so I won't be so stingy like her lest I get the same treatment on ma homestay in the future.

我相信輪迴,所以我不會向她一樣小氣免得在我以後的homestay得到報應

Except the money from dad,who can make a safe cornor that I can rely on him or her? Nobody.So I just believe myself.

除了老爸給的錢,誰能給我一個安全的角落讓我可以依靠他/她? 沒有人。所以我只相信我自己。

a group of brain-broken girls, and do I want to be the same like them?

一群腦殘女孩,我想變得跟他們一樣嗎?

maybe I'm already a member of them.

也許我早就是他們的一份子了

*******....I said she can't read more word.

混蛋...我說過了不准她往下看更多

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  • 10 年前
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    I have privacy, those who invade this will be punished.A: add a conjunction after the commaA: use a semicolon instead of acommaI hate invader.A: add an article before invader(an, the)A: use plural noun (invaders)So I turn the language into English.A: delete the subordinate conjunction (so)You can try to learn my word,but I won't write any secret onmy diary anymore.A: use plural nouns (words, secrets)You won't see anything what you want .A: omit either "anything"or "what" Believe that my Englishcomposition will improve a lot.A: OK if meant to be a commandToday,I have a serious conflict with my mom again.A: Change "have" to"had" or " will have" Although I know that she is really concern about me,but Ican't control my bad temper.A: change  (n)concern to (adj) concerned, and omit either "Although"  or    "but" Unimaginable...money can make a person like a miser.A: omit "like"Money makes a people who is selfish.A: a group of brain-dead girls, do Iwant to be the same like them?maybe I'm already a member of them.A: I said she couldn't read(any) more.A: I said she couldn't read another word.

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