I have privacy,those who invade this will be punished.
I hate invader.
So I turn the language into English.
You can try to learn my word,but I won't write any secret on my diary anymore.
You won't see anything what you want .
I believe that my English composition will improve a lot.
Today,I have a serious conflict with my mom again.
Although I know that she is really concern about me,but I can't control my bad temper.
Unimaginable...money can make a person like a miser.
Money makes a people who is selfish.
I believe transmigration,so I won't be so stingy like her lest I get the same treatment on ma homestay in the future.
Except the money from dad,who can make a safe cornor that I can rely on him or her? Nobody.So I just believe myself.
a group of brain-broken girls, and do I want to be the same like them?
maybe I'm already a member of them.
*******....I said she can't read more word.
- Dark HelmetLv 710 年前最佳解答
I have privacy, those who invade this will be punished.A: add a conjunction after the commaA: use a semicolon instead of acommaI hate invader.A: add an article before invader(an, the)A: use plural noun (invaders)So I turn the language into English.A: delete the subordinate conjunction (so)You can try to learn my word,but I won't write any secret onmy diary anymore.A: use plural nouns (words, secrets)You won't see anything what you want .A: omit either "anything"or "what" Believe that my Englishcomposition will improve a lot.A: OK if meant to be a commandToday,I have a serious conflict with my mom again.A: Change "have" to"had" or " will have" Although I know that she is really concern about me,but Ican't control my bad temper.A: change (n)concern to (adj) concerned, and omit either "Although" or "but" Unimaginable...money can make a person like a miser.A: omit "like"Money makes a people who is selfish.A: a group of brain-dead girls, do Iwant to be the same like them?maybe I'm already a member of them.A: I said she couldn't read(any) more.A: I said she couldn't read another word.