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請英文文法好的高手進來幫我修改這邊英文文章..修改並解釋~

我想請英文高手幫我修改這篇文章~謝謝

do you want to make more money in your life? A young man. he’s 30 years old. he can make 20 Thousand a month inhis own business. He said, “I had so many working experience in my life. I wasa salesman. I was an engineer and I was working for computer company.But i know if I want to change my life. I needto find the another way to make more money. “In one day, he got a new idea. He wanted toinvent a durable and waterproof wallet. This wallet is very different fromanother wallet. he used a piece of paper to produce the wallet. In his story, he wanted to tell us. “don’tgive up your dream. You will find your potential on your work. you just need tobring your talent to your idea.

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  • 10 年前
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    Dear版大您好^ - ^ 也容本Panda來幫您ㄅ; 如下:

    (紅字為幫您修改的詞; 紅框裡為不必要的字) Would you like to make more money (in your life)? “in your life”為贅詞可以刪掉A young man who is 30 years old (he can) makes 20 thousand dollars a month in his own business. (He said,) “I have had so much work experience (in my life). I was a salesman, (I was) an engineer, and (I was) also worked for a computer company.不需刻意強調 “he said”. 一般人可從前文推測出框框裡的話是他說的不可用 “had so much work experience”因為這表示他現在已經退休而在陳述以前的事, 得用過去完成式Experience在這是不可數的, 要用 “much”當你在陳述你做過的事時, 不需一直重複強調 “I was”因為都是“你自己”做過的事But I knew if I wanted to change my life, I needed to find (the) a way to make more money.” 在陳述之前的事要用過去式(In) One day, an (new) idea popped into his head; he thought of inventing a durable and waterproof wallet. This wallet was very different from other wallets, as it was made of paper. An idea popped into his head = 他想到了一個好點子要用 “other wallets”(其他錢包)而非“another wallet”(另一個錢包)最後一段幫你改過, 用太多不必要的字了= - =The moral of the story is, “don’t ever give up your dreams, as you will always discover your true potential (on your work). You just need to match your talent with your idea.加入“ever”有強調之意True potential = 真正的潛力重整如下:(寫不下= - = 所以寫在意見欄)希望有幫到您靈活學英文

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    2011-01-26 11:58:47 補充:

    Would you like to make more money?

    A young man who is 30 years old makes 20 thousand dollars a month in his own business.

    2011-01-26 11:59:04 補充:

    “I have had so much work experience. I was a salesman, an engineer, and also worked for a computer company. But I knew if I wanted to change my life, I needed to find a way to make more money.”

    2011-01-26 11:59:14 補充:

    One day, an idea popped into his head; he thought of inventing a durable and waterproof wallet. This wallet was very different from other wallets, as it was made of paper.

    2011-01-26 11:59:20 補充:

    The moral of the story is, “don’t ever give up your dreams, as you will always discover your true potential. You just need to match your talent with your idea.

    參考資料: Pandora's Panda翻譯社
  • 10 年前

    do you want to make more money in your life? A young man who is 30 years old. he just can make 20 Thousand NT a month in his own business. He said, “I had so many working experience in my life. I was a salesman, an engineer and working for a computer company.But I know if I want to change my life, I need to find another way to make more money. “ one day, he got a new idea. He wanted to invent a durable and waterproof wallet. This wallet is very different from any other ones. he used a piece of paper to produce the wallet. In his story, he wanted to tell us. “Don’t give up your dream, You will find your potential on your work. you just need to bring your talent into your idea.

  • 10 年前

    Do you want to make more(extra) money in your life? A young man who is 30 years old, can make 20 Thousand a month in his own business. He said, “I had so many working experience in my life. I was a salesman. I was an engineer and I was working for a computer company.But i know if I want to change my life. I needto find another way to make more money. “One day, he got a new idea. He wanted to invent a durable and waterproof wallet. This wallet is very different fromanother one . he used a piece of paper to produce the wallet. (He produced the wallet by used a piece of paper) In his story, he wanted to tell us. (What he tried to tell us in his store was) “D on’t give up your dream. You will find your potential on your work. you just need to bring your talent to your idea.

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