英文遊記,詳細入內

這次的作業是英文遊記,由於第一次寫,所以格式、寫作方法都不太熟悉,

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內文:

The funny trip of the country Class: 401 Number: 04 This winter vacation, I didn’t go any special place. The farthest place where I went was Taoyuan, my mother’s natal home. On a sunny day, my family and I rode two motorcycles to our natal home to give some wishes to my grandparents. When we arrived there, we were all tired, because we spent one hour to get there, and 【the way there was really rock】【路很陡】(我不確定). I even can’t feel my ass! After taking a nap, we rode bicycles on the road. Fresh air, warm sunshine, blue sky and golden rice field on both sides were full of the whole countries. What scene can be more beautiful than this? People at countries are unlike ones at city. People here are always practical doing their own work. They don’t want to make a lot of money. They just want “One is enough to eat, wear and live of life.” People at city always want more and more money. To reach the object, they can even use any means. They never satisfy with their life even they are rich. That’s why I really like live in countries. When we got home, we couldn’t take a break, because we had to prepare for dinner. That was really a big engineering, and really let me know difficulty of cooking. After dinner, we played poker, and watched TV together. That was a great time. After them, we went home, and the road is still rock. Maybe the trip isn’t special and funny for others, but it’s the best and the most comfortable trip for me. I hope I can go there next year.

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  • 10 年前
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    A funny trip in the country 用the代表別人已知道你的旅程,但是你是介紹別人不知道的旅程,所以標題用A。在鄉下要用in而不是at

    This winter vacation, I didn’t go any special place. The farthest place where I went was Taoyuan, my mother’s natal home.On a sunny day, my family and I rode two motorcycles to our natal home to give some wishes to my grandparents. When we arrived there, we were all tired, because we spent one hour to get there, and 【the journey was really steep/rough】【路很陡】(我不確定). I can barely feel my hip! 路途用journey比較好,顛簸用steep/rough。”幾乎感覺不到”用barely比較好,ass太粗俗,hip比較文雅。After taking a nap, we rode bicycles on the road. Both sides of the whole country were full of fresh air, warm sunshine, blue sky and golden rice field. What scenery can be more beautiful than this? A充滿B的用法是A is\are full of B.你原本的用法寫反了。景色用scenery比較好。People in the country are unlike the ones in the city. People here are always practical doing their own work. They don’t want to make a lot of money. They just want to lead an “Enough to eat, wear and live” life. People in the city always want more and more money. To reach their goal, they will take any means. They never satisfy with their life, not even they are actually rich. That’s why I really like to live in the country. 鄉下的人要用people in the country(城市裡的人亦同)。country當”鄉下”時,是不可數名詞。“達成目標”要用reach one’s goal比較好。“不擇手段”動詞用take比較正確,take有”採取”的意思(如:take action)。“即使已經很有錢”有轉折意思,用not even。這裡的like跟live都是動詞,要用不定詞to連接。When we got home, we couldn’t take a break, because we had to prepare the dinner. That was really a great matter, and really let me know the difficulty of cooking. After dinner, we played poker, and watched TV together. That was a great time. Then, we went home, and the road is still steep/rough. Maybe the trip wasn’t special and funny for others, but it’s the best and the most unforgettable trip for me. I hope I can go there next year.準備晚餐用prepare the dinner 即可。“大事”用great matter比較正確。文中有很多After…,換成Then才不會太單調。旅程發生在過去,所以用wasn’t。comfortable意思是舒適,放這裡文意有點怪,換成難忘(unforgettable)比較順。

    祝你英文更進步~

    希望對你有幫助^_^

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