My favorite singer is xxx,she is very famous.She is medium height,and she is also thin.She had long brown hair before,but she has short brown hair now.She sings very well and hard-working.She isn`t serious at all,she is kind and polite.I think she is outgoing.I like her very much.Maybe she can be very success one day.
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My favorite singer is xxx. She is very famous. She is medium height, and she is thin. She had long brown hair before, but now she has short hair. She sings very well and works very hard. She isn't serious at all. She is kind and polite. I think she is outgoing. I like her very much. Maybe she can be very successful one day.
1. sings very well 和 hard-working 不能用 and 連接。 hard-working 是形容詞，very well 是副詞，不能連在一起。 改成 works very hard 和 sings very well 動詞對動詞才可以。very well 對 very hard 比較工整。
2. can be very 後面要用形容詞 successful，不能用名詞 success.
其他改的不是錯誤。 also thin 的 also 多餘。把 now 移到前面，可以立刻和 before 對比。第二個 brown 多餘，所以刪掉。這些不算錯誤，改了比較順。