CharisC 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 9 年前

文法修正! ((急!!!

中文:

沙拉非常的有錢,她的爸爸讓她到貴族學校學習‧

因為沙拉非常的有錢,所以有些同學不喜歡沙拉。

然後,沙拉常常被同學欺負。有一天因為沙拉的父親破產了,

所以她變成了一位傭人,但是她還是很善良。

我們應該學習她的優點。

英文:

Salad is very rich. Her father let her to the Aristocrat school study.

Because Salad is very rich,some schoolmate doesn't like Salad.

And then,Salad is bullied by that schoolmate. One day ,

because Salad's father is bankruptcy,she become a servant.

Although,she become a servant,but she is very softie.

We should learn her advantage.

請懂的人幫忙檢查一下文法有沒有錯!

謝謝! :)

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  • Ed
    Lv 6
    9 年前
    最佳解答

    文法大致正確,但全文須用過去式,只有些用詞問題。試修飾如下:Salad was very rich and her father sent (let) her to a rich school to study.Salad was so rich that some schoolmate didn't like her.As a result, Salad was often bullied by some schoolmates. One day,Salad's father got bankrupted and she became a servant.She was still very nice though, and we should learn from her. (雖然Salad 也可用作人名,但常用人名是Sara或Sarah)

    2011-04-12 13:47:56 補充:

    Correction: 貴族學校 may use "expensive private school" instead of "rich school".

  • 9 年前

    Sarah had been very rich, and her father had sent (也就是等於送她去此學校學習的意思) her to an exclusive school (借用了 Jeff und ARBURG 的意見) to study.

    However, since Sarah had been very rich,some of her schoolmates didn't like her very much.

    And that had led to the bullying of Sarah by her schoolmates.

    Yet one day, as Sarah's father had been bankrupted, she had become a servant. But although she had become a servant, she was still very gentle and kindhearted. And we should learn from her (good qualities, 可加可不加).

    參考資料: 住在加拿大的我 :)
  • 9 年前

    貴族學校 = exclusive school

  • 9 年前

    大大 !我這樣看了一下 你的although文法 就用錯了,中間不可用but優

    還有 let her to the Aristocrat school study,

    let 你這邊就用錯啦,要改成let her to v

    而且her father 第三人稱要加s

    其實敘述一件事的時候用簡單事就OK了。

    以初學者的角度的話,的確時大部分文法沒有錯,但還是太中式英文。

    2011-04-11 22:59:41 補充:

    although s+v, s+v 雖然.....但....... 不用加but.

    而且although 後面不用加逗點優^^。

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  • 9 年前

    Salad is very rich. Her father let her study to the Aristocrat school.

    Because Salad is very rich,some schoolmates don't like Salad.

    And then,Salad is bullied by that schoolmate.

    One day ,because Salad's father is bankruptcy,she become a servant.

    Although,she become a servant,but she is very kind.

    We should learn her advantage.

    只知道一點點 所以只修改一點點 剩下的問其他的高手^^

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