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I will never forget the first trip with no laughter that I ever had. I was separated to the othergroup that I never knew people of them. I didn’t talk to anyone in my group,and no one talked to me. It is a mixed blessing for me that camp with the otherperson I never knew, I was at a loss what to do, wearing and tearing mypatience. The worst part is field games. I was standing there as a stranger infront of them, still in silence. I paid for this trip, but they paid me a largeof disappoint. Much to my relief, we had finished this trip, and I cannot bearthe thought of this trip.

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有些字黏在一起了,麻煩各位了==|| 我是直接複製貼上的~_~

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mixed blessing我想陳述的是五味雜陳的感覺不是nightmare那種感覺@_@

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sorry,最後一句 I cannot bearthe thought of this trip是I cannot bear the thought of this trip.

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  • 匿名使用者
    9 年前
    最佳解答

    I will never forget the first trip with no laughter that I ever had.

    這句完全doesn't make sense.

    你是說你永遠不會忘記第一個旅行沒有笑?

    把"that I ever had"拿掉

    I will never forget the trip where there was no laughter.

    I will never forget the first no-laughter trip that I've ever had.

    I was separated to the other group that I never knew people of them.

    "people of them"是錯誤的

    I was separated and grouped with strangers.

    I was separated to the other group where I didn't know of anyone.

    I didn’t talk to anyone in my group, and no one talked to me.

    這句話ok

    要比較口語說法是

    I didn't talk to anyone in my group, nor them to me.

    It is a mixed blessing for me that camp with the otherperson I never knew, I was at a loss what to do, wearing and tearing mypatience.

    這句前後不依

    如果是blessing為甚麼wearing down your patience?

    還有,注意你逗號用法,很多美國人也犯同樣錯誤。查清楚英文逗號的用法,非常重要。

    如果想改blessing成nightmare會比較好

    It was a nightmare for me at that camp with the people I never knew. I didn't know what to do, and it was wearing down my patience.

    The worst part (was the) field games.

    I was standing there as a stranger in front of them, still in silence.

    在你這句話裡的still意思是"不動"而不是"仍舊"

    比較好的說法:

    I was standing in silence before them as a stranger.

    I appeared as a stranger, standing in silence before them.

    I paid for this trip, but they paid me a large of disappoint.

    比較好的說法:

    I paid for this trip, but they returned me with a great disappointment (instead).

    disappoint 是(及物)動詞

    disappointment 是名詞

    Much to my relief, we had finished this trip, and I cannot bearthe thought of this trip.

    again, 逗點用法錯誤

    bearthe? 是想說brief短暫?

    Much to my relief, the trip was finally over. I could not brief the thought of that trip ever again.

    雖然brief在這裡可用

    但我比較建議使用bare

    參考資料: My already fried brain.
  • Lily
    Lv 5
    9 年前

    I will never forget the first trip with no laughter that I ever had. I was separated to the othergroup that I never knew people of them. I didn’t talk to anyone in my group,and no one talked to me. It is a mixed blessing for me that camp with the otherperson I never knew, I was at a loss what to do, wearing and tearing mypatience. The worst part is field games. I was standing there as a stranger infront of them, still in silence. I paid for this trip, but they paid me a largeof disappoint. Much to my relief, we had finished this trip, and I cannot bearthe thought of this trip.

    I will never forget the first trip I ever had, as there was no laughter. I was separated to a another group where I didn't know anyone, I didn't talk to anyone in my group and nobody talked to me either. I didn't know what to do as I was lost, the worst part was a field game, because I didn't know anyone in that camp, I was alone by myself standing in front of strangers. I paid for this trip but I didn't enjoy it and yet I was very disappointed. To my relief the trip ended, the thought of the trip was a nightmare.

    參考資料: Lily
  • 9 年前

    I will never forget the first trip with no laughter that I've ever had.

    I was isolated from the other members of the group of which I knew none.

    I didn't talk to anyone in my group, nor did they talk to me.

    It was a mixed blessing for me that I didn't knew any other person in a camp.

    I was at a loss about what to do, my patience wearing over time.

    The worst part is field games.

    I was standing there like a stranger in front of them, still in silence.

    I paid for that trip, but they paid me a large amount of disappointment in return.

    Much to my relief, I have gone through that trip, and I cannot breathe whenever

    thinking of that trip.

    除了我看到的文法錯誤外,為了我認為的通順,連句法也改了。

    改這篇我也學了不少你的用法,算是互相學習啦!

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