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麻煩高手幫我檢查這小短短文~~有錯的地方跟我說，順便說怎麼改比較好~~謝謝

I will never forget the first trip with no laughter that I ever had. I was separated to the othergroup that I never knew people of them. I didn’t talk to anyone in my group,and no one talked to me. It is a mixed blessing for me that camp with the otherperson I never knew, I was at a loss what to do, wearing and tearing mypatience. The worst part is field games. I was standing there as a stranger infront of them, still in silence. I paid for this trip, but they paid me a largeof disappoint. Much to my relief, we had finished this trip, and I cannot bearthe thought of this trip.

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有些字黏在一起了，麻煩各位了==|| 我是直接複製貼上的~_~

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mixed blessing我想陳述的是五味雜陳的感覺不是nightmare那種感覺@_@

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sorry,最後一句 I cannot bearthe thought of this trip是I cannot bear the thought of this trip.

Answer 1

最佳解答

I will never forget the first trip with no laughter that I ever had.

這句完全doesn't make sense.

你是說你永遠不會忘記第一個旅行沒有笑？

把"that I ever had"拿掉

I will never forget the trip where there was no laughter.

I will never forget the first no-laughter trip that I've ever had.

I was separated to the other group that I never knew people of them.

"people of them"是錯誤的

I was separated and grouped with strangers.

I was separated to the other group where I didn't know of anyone.

I didn’t talk to anyone in my group, and no one talked to me.

這句話ｏｋ

要比較口語說法是

I didn't talk to anyone in my group, nor them to me.

It is a mixed blessing for me that camp with the otherperson I never knew, I was at a loss what to do, wearing and tearing mypatience.

這句前後不依

如果是blessing為甚麼wearing down your patience?

還有，注意你逗號用法，很多美國人也犯同樣錯誤。查清楚英文逗號的用法，非常重要。

如果想改blessing成nightmare會比較好

It was a nightmare for me at that camp with the people I never knew. I didn't know what to do, and it was wearing down my patience.

The worst part (was the) field games.

I was standing there as a stranger in front of them, still in silence.

在你這句話裡的still意思是＂不動＂而不是＂仍舊＂

比較好的說法:

I was standing in silence before them as a stranger.

或

I appeared as a stranger, standing in silence before them.

I paid for this trip, but they paid me a large of disappoint.

比較好的說法：

I paid for this trip, but they returned me with a great disappointment (instead).

disappoint 是(及物)動詞

disappointment 是名詞

Much to my relief, we had finished this trip, and I cannot bearthe thought of this trip.

again, 逗點用法錯誤

bearthe? 是想說brief短暫？

Much to my relief, the trip was finally over. I could not brief the thought of that trip ever again.

雖然brief在這裡可用

但我比較建議使用bare

參考資料： My already fried brain.

Answer 2

I will never forget the first trip with no laughter that I ever had. I was separated to the othergroup that I never knew people of them. I didn’t talk to anyone in my group,and no one talked to me. It is a mixed blessing for me that camp with the otherperson I never knew, I was at a loss what to do, wearing and tearing mypatience. The worst part is field games. I was standing there as a stranger infront of them, still in silence. I paid for this trip, but they paid me a largeof disappoint. Much to my relief, we had finished this trip, and I cannot bearthe thought of this trip.

I will never forget the first trip I ever had, as there was no laughter. I was separated to a another group where I didn't know anyone, I didn't talk to anyone in my group and nobody talked to me either. I didn't know what to do as I was lost, the worst part was a field game, because I didn't know anyone in that camp, I was alone by myself standing in front of strangers. I paid for this trip but I didn't enjoy it and yet I was very disappointed. To my relief the trip ended, the thought of the trip was a nightmare.

參考資料： Lily

Answer 3

I will never forget the first trip with no laughter that I've ever had.

I was isolated from the other members of the group of which I knew none.

I didn't talk to anyone in my group, nor did they talk to me.

It was a mixed blessing for me that I didn't knew any other person in a camp.

I was at a loss about what to do, my patience wearing over time.

The worst part is field games.

I was standing there like a stranger in front of them, still in silence.

I paid for that trip, but they paid me a large amount of disappointment in return.

Much to my relief, I have gone through that trip, and I cannot breathe whenever

thinking of that trip.

除了我看到的文法錯誤外，為了我認為的通順，連句法也改了。

改這篇我也學了不少你的用法，算是互相學習啦！