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I was born and raised in a ordinary family, And I am the second child at home.

My strongest trait is humble but have my own opinion, get with suroundings easily and I'm a good team player, it is easy to get friends to trust. I believe that "Impossible is nothing" , and I willing to accept all challenges and I know I can work well under stress and do the best!

My school grades were higher than average when I was at college, except as an assistant secretary in the student association, but also from college department office and the part-time work experience in which to learn to treat people, and can be flexibly applied to daily life and the workplace. June 2009 successfully graduated from the University, and in September the same year passed mariners examination.

Into "Energy Shipping" in 2010 as a trainee, and I continues stay in VLCC vessels after I got Deck Officer certificate. Our ship mainly sailing between Taiwan and Persian Gulf. During this time, I am not only actively do the job what I inchage to the best of my ability, but studied second mate's job description hard if opportunity knocks, I could take it.

Although container ships and tankers are not the same, but I believe in my ability to learn and a positive attitude, be able to adapt in the shortest period of time. I wish I could join your team, and I will do my best to contribute myself here.

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to John:

"Our ship mainly traveled between Taiwan and the Persian Gulf."

這句是說"我們船主要航行於台灣及波斯灣間" 我才用sailing,所以用travel是ok的?

to prisoner26535:

我是想表達"內斂卻不失主見"

但是好難翻,所以才想用替代字= ="

顯然效果有點......

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  • 9 年前
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    I was born and raised in an average family, and I am the second eldest child at home.

    My strongest trait is humbleness but I also have my own opinions. I adapt myself to different environments easily. I'm a good team player and it is easy for my friends to trust me.

    I believe "Impossible is nothing" (可以去掉 that) and I am willing to accept all challenges and I know I can work well under pressure and do the very best!

    My school grades were higher than average when I was in college, even though I worked part-time as an assistant secretary at the student association and in the college department office. From the part-time work experience I learned how to interact with people and how to be flexible in daily life and the work. In June 2009 I successfully graduated from the university, and in September the same year I passed the mariners examination.

    As a trainee in "Energy Shipping" in 2010 , I continued to stay in VLCC vessels after I received (比 got 正式) the Deck Officer certificate. Our ship mainly traveled between Taiwan and the Persian Gulf. During this time, I not only actively did the job that I was in charged with to the best of my ability, but also diligently studied the second mate's job description whenever I had the chance. I could handle it well.

    Although container ships and tankers are not the same, I believe my ability to learn and my positive attitude will let me adapt in the shortest amount of time. I hope I can join your team, and I will do my best to contribute to your company.

    2012-01-08 23:18:42 補充:

    關於 "Our ship mainly traveled between Taiwan and the Persian Gulf." 這句,travel 和 sail 應該都是 ok 的。

    My strongest trait is humbleness but I also have my own opinions. 或許可改為 "I'm a very humble person but I have my own opinions as well."

  • 9 年前

    謝謝你 John !

  • 9 年前

    My strongest trait is humbleness - how ironic!

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