貓咪 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 8 年前

請幫我修改一下講稿...急急急!!!!(贈15點)

以下是我弟(小5)參加演講比賽的部分講稿,是我媽幫他擬的,請幫忙看文法及拼字是否有誤?謝!

Have you ever thought about whom is the most important in the world for you? Without any hesitation, I would answer “My family”.Today, at here, I am going to give a speech:"My family".

There are five members in my family that lives together, including my grandfather, my parents, my elder brother and myself. My grandfather was a tailor before he retired. He used to live in Tainan by himself then moved to Kaohsiung with us for two years. He plays Chinese chess with neighbors in the Fruit Park every afternoon. At times, he goes karaoke with his friends. He cooks sometimes especially when my parents were not at home.

My father is a department manager at Information Technology Division. Most of the time he is very humorous. On Tuesdays and Fridays evening, he plays badminton in the feather field. He teaches my elder brother and me Mathematics and Science. Cooking is fun, as does the chemical experiment for my father. On weekends, he usually cooks delicious food and makes something-special meals for us.

My mother is a housewife. She is a good listener in my family. She always teaches us some questions that we don't understand, and help with our homework especially English.

My brother is a junior high school student in the eighth grade. Doctor admitted the diagnosis that he got Hodgkin’s Lymphoma stage IV at September in 2010. He never gives up any opportunity of study in treatment period. At present, his disease had received the control. I thought he is very smart and brave. I believe everything will go well to him.

As for me, I can play piano, pianica, ocarina, recorder and drum. I am an optimist. I don’t take it seriously though I’m frequently absent-minded that annoys my family as usual.

We usually share our thoughts and feelings to each other and always have the supper together as a family. I feel blessed to be born into this family as we are very closely knitted.

My discourse reaches this point the conclusion. Thank you!

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  • 8 年前
    最佳解答

    本人的建議如下:

    On Tuesdays and Fridays evening, he plays badminton in the feather field .

    =>He plays badminton in the evening on Tuesdays and Fridays.

    =>He plays badminton on the court in the evening on Tuesdays and Fridays.

    註:網球場、羽毛球場 = court;在羽毛球場 = on the court

    He never gives up any opportunity of study in treatment period .

    =>He never gives up any opportunity to study when he was under treatment in hospital .

    I don’t take it seriously though I’m frequently absent-minded that annoys my family as usual .

    =>I don’t take it seriously though I’m frequently absent-minded that always annoys my family .

    希望能幫得上忙!

    參考資料: by myself
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  • lobo
    Lv 5
    8 年前

    he was diagnosed by doctor that he got...

    2012-02-14 07:15:19 補充:

    最後寫thank for listening my report of my family.thank you

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