祐祐 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 8 年前

英文演講稿(My Dream)文法是否需要修正

Everybody have different dream. When there is dream, there is hope. Dream can aspirate people. I have dream too. I wish that wherever I am, I could live everyday to the fullness. I also hope that my life will be a meaningful and vivid one where everyday there is a new happening. Life will be so interesting and worth living then. I can make new friends at different place and getting to know and understand different kinds of people. Meeting new people can also enrich my life. I will have more stories and knowledge to share with my friends at gathering. Doesn’t it sound wonderful? But how can I achieve my dream? I will start by sincerely treat my entire friends and also earnestly treat all matter that I come across. My dream may seem simple but to me it is meaningful. Dream motivates people to move on. Thru fulfilling dream, people achieve hope and success. Life will be significant and meaningful. I hope my dream will come true in my future.“Cash is king” people said that is really a truth to me in this time. If I can save money enough in future, my dream will come true and plans to conduct. During the period of uncertain economy, this dream seems to be a utopian idea. However, persevering in saving money is my task for implementing this dream. To work hard, to get part-time job and to save money will be the one thing for my life. And another one of the most important thing is to study hard, because it will be a base and criticality to others.

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  • 8 年前
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    Everybody has his own different dreams. Where there is dream,there is hope. Dream(s) can aspirate people. I have dream(s) too. I wish thatwherever I am, I can make the most of everyday ( to thefull). I also hope that my life will be meaningful and vivid everyday nomatter what happens. My life will become very interesting and will be then worthsparing no labor( 不遺餘力). I can make new friends in different places and get toknow and (to) understand different life styles of different kinds ofpeople. Meeting new people can also enrich my life. I will have more storiesand knowledge to share with my friends at those gatherings. Doesn’t itsound wonderful?But how can I achieve my dreams? I will start by sincerelytreating all my friends to what I come across. My dreams mayseem simple but to me they are meaningful. Dreams motivate peopleto move on. Through fulfilling dreams, people achieve hope and success.Life will be significant and meaningful. I hope my dreams will come true in my(the) future. People say “Cash is king”. That is really true tome in the present. If I can save money enough in the future, my dreams mayhave better chance of coming true. During the period of economical depression, onlydreams without efforts will turn out to be a utopian idea. However, persistingin saving money is my task for implementing my dreams. To work hard, toget part-time job and to save money will be the very thing in my life.And the other most important thing is to study hard, because it will bebasic and critical to me. Where there iswill, there is hope.留得青山在,那怕沒材燒。Treat …to 款待人享用The very thing 就是這件事

    2012-03-01 17:52:06 補充:

    Correction:

    Where there's life there's hope.留得青山在,不怕沒柴燒

    Where there is a will there is a way. 有志者事竟成。

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  • 阿昌
    Lv 7
    8 年前

    Each people have different dreams. When a dream, there is hope. Dreams can be inhaled. I have many dreams. I think, as long as I am, every day I can live the fullness. I also hope that my life is a meaningful and lively, where every day there is a new occurrence. Life will be very interesting and worth living. I can be in different places, new friends, get to know and understand different people. Meet new friends, has enriched my life. I will have more stories and knowledge sharing with my friends at the party. Does not sound wonderful? But how can I achieve my dream? First, I will sincerely deal with my friends, seriously, all the material I have encountered. My dream sounds simple, but for me it makes sense. The dream to inspire people to move on. Direct realization of the dream, hope and success. Life will be an important and meaningful. I hope my dream will be in my future real. "Cash is king" is indeed a truth, I am during this time. If I can save enough money in the future, my dream will come true, and plan. In uncertain economic times, this dream seems to be a utopian idea. However, insist on saving money is my task to realize this dream. Hard work, part-time, save money, will be the one thing in my life. And another of the most important thing is to study hard, because this will be the base and critical to others.

    可修改成這樣

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  • Louis
    Lv 7
    8 年前

    不只是文法的問題,你的內容太空泛了。用口述,大概只有一分半鐘,在這麼短的內容裡,不宜放進太多的目標,然後每個目標都像蜻蜓點水,沾一下就飛走,看不出這個夢想有什麼特別,也看不出有實現的可能(因為有時用了與事實不符的假設語氣,表示無法實現)。應在開始第一句就將my dream的範圍縮小到一個你能控制的程度(只有一個夢)。

    2012-02-25 11:54:27 補充:

    Everybody has a dream.(動詞應配合單數主詞)

    While there is life, there is hope.是原來的諺語。兩者有因果關係。但When there is dream, there is hope.是沒有邏輯關係的,因為hope也是一種dream,只是實現的可能性較高。此外,dream是可數名詞,應加不定冠詞。

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