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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 8 年前

拜託各位幫我批改英文作文 盡量詳細 非常謝謝

明年即將要考學測

英文老師又請產假

很想增進英文作文能力

(我的英文很不好)

又還沒找到合適的家教

所以只好將自己寫的作文PO到知識+

拜託各位幫我指出錯誤的地方

並且提供更好的句子 謝謝你們!!

“It was just an ordinary day.” said a middle-class man named Mike. He holds

a wallet in hand and begins to tell us his mystery story.

That morning, he took the train to get his company and sit in which he used

to sit. He was too tired to stay awake because he had stayed up late last night.

Soon falling asleep, Mike felt he entered a wonderful dream meeting such a

pretty lady.

In the dream, the lady was not merely charming but also polite. Before sitting

by his side, she asked Mike with soft voice to get his admission. Although Mike

was always shy to face people, he had a nice talk with her and even knew her

name, Helen.

While he was still enjoying the delightful feelings, the thunder suddenly woke

him up. The disappointing feelings immediately fulled in his heart. But when Mike

looked his right side, he found an unbelievable staff—a wallet! And the most

surprising discovery was that there was a name, Hellen, wrote on its back!

It’s really a strange story, but it certainly happens to Mike. Now, he has a

new thing to worry about: he longs to find out Hellen, but there are a huge

number of women named Hellen!

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拜託 可以幫我改嗎??

是因為是匿名的所以不願意嗎??

難道非匿名者就不會在你們回答完問題後移除嗎??

就算你們把某某帳號當作黑名單來看待

對方也可以再重辦一個帳號呀

我是不會移除問題的

拜託你們回答我

2 個已更新項目:

謝謝各位QAQ

另外uncle sean可以解答我一些疑問嗎?

hold的過去式可以使用holded嗎??held不是hold的過去式嗎??

還有可以請問一下the night before和last night的差異嗎??

謝謝!!

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  • 8 年前
    最佳解答

    “It was just an ordinary day.” said a middle-class man named Mike. He holded

    a wallet in hand and began to tell us his mystery story.

    That morning, he took the train to work gethis company (刪除) and sat at where he was used to sit. in which he used to sit. He was too tired to stay awake because he had stayed up late last night. the night before .

    Soon he fell asleep, Mike felt he entered a wonderful was in a dream meeting such(刪除) a pretty lady.

    In the dream, the lady was not only charming but also polite. Before sitting by him , she asked Mike with soft voice for permission . Although Mike

    was a shy person , he had a nice talk with her and even knew her name, Helen.

    While he was still enjoying the delightful feelings, a sudden thunder woke him up. He was so disappointed . But when Mike looked to his right side, he found an unbelievable object —a wallet! And the most surprising discovery was that there was a name, Hellen, written on it ! It’s really a weird story, but it was what really happened to Mike. Now, he has a new trouble: he longs to find out who Hellen is , but there are a large number of women named Hellen!

    2012-07-07 16:31:17 補充:

    回不回答跟你匿名否關係不大,修改文章的困難在於,有時侯不知作者要表達什麼 ,修改的人還情願自己寫一篇。

    不過,你寫得很清楚,蠻好改的。

    2012-07-09 12:23:35 補充:

    關於last night和tomorrow在英文作文中常出現的錯誤,原因在於「時間點」,事發當時的昨夜和明天,在作文中都是事後的描述,也就是說寫作的這時(除非日記),這昨夜和明天都已經是「以前的時間」,而不是真正的昨夜和明天,故應改成前一晚the night before和翌日the next day,時間上才說得通。

    2012-07-09 12:24:26 補充:

    holded 是我寫太快弄錯了,sorry,hold的過去式是held。

  • 8 年前

    我是負責回答生物的

    如果是真的碰到考試問題

    你有把你的目前說出來

    基本上大家都會願意幫忙

    不要想太多

  • 8 年前

    Yes, Mike, the wallet with $2000 USD is mine. How many girls nowadays carry wallet? It must be mine for sure.

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