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我寫好了,希望各位大大幫我修改錯誤的部分。

例如說文法,拼字等。

謝謝。

The first time I traveled abroad was when I was little. I was too young to remember many things. I just remember that the snow was so white so cold, and the Miso soup was good to drink. This time, I went to China and I’m older enough to remember the thing which had happened.

The first day, we went to Hong Kong Disneyland. At the entrance, there have a big Mickey mouse. It’s was made by many flowers. Then we continue along this road. I saw a lot of Stitch on this road. I am the big fan of Stitch. I like it so much. I ask my mother to help me take some picture with Stitch.

There were a lot of people in Disney. So if we want to play any recreational facilities, we needed to wait for a long time. I don’t like Chinese because they always jump the queue. It made me very angry.

We went to a 4D theater, it’s called “Mickey's Magic Show.” I like it so much because it was so lifelike. Let me tell you some examples. If there had some food appear in the movie, then you can smell the taste of food. If someone fails, than you will have a feeling of shake. If someone sneezes or splashing water, there will be water spilled on you. Don’t you think that it is so fun?

We left Disney and go to Huizhou to visited my aunt family. My aunt took us to the amusement park which called Dicoco. Dicoco just like Taiwan’s Baby boss. We can choose a career and to participate in the actual operation process, to experience the spirit of work, to earn money, and also discretionary income, to learn the real operation of the society. I was very happy in that day. I play a female firefighter, a lawyer, a model, a doctor ect.

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We also had go to the zoo. This zoo is different from any other zoos. It don’t have any fence. You need to drive a car to visit the zoo. The animal will come to close to you. You can open the window and feed it or touch it. It was so cool, but my father didn’t think so.

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He shall not be permitted to open the windows. He said that because the animal will attack us. But I don’t think so. I think my dad was just fear of contacting with animals.

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It was a great vacation. It was so fun, so cool and so excited. I played a lot, ate a lot and saw a lot. If I have a chance to go to China again, than I will be very very very happy.

((這是結尾可是我覺得怪怪的而且有點少。

((可以幫我多加幾句嗎??

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  • 7 年前
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    It was when I was little that I traveled abroad at the first time. In fact, I was too little to remember all of the things. The only thing I could remember was that the snow there was white and cold, and the Miso soup was delicious. This time, during my summer vacation, I went to China. Now, I'm already old enough to remember all of the matters that happened there.

    At the first day, we went to Hong Kong Disneyland. At the entrance, there was a big Mickey mouse made by many flowers. Then, we continued to walk along the road. There were lots of Stitches on the road. To tell the truth, I am a big fan of Stitch. Therefore, I asked my mother to help me take some pictures with Stitch.

    There were a lot of people in Disney. So, if we wanted to take any recreation facilities, we needed to wait for a long time. However, some Chinese kept cutting in line which made me very angry and hate them.

    We went to a 4D theater called “Mickey's Magic Show.” I liked it so much because it was so lifelike. Let me tell you some examples. If there were some food in the movie, you could smell the taste of those food. Also, if someone failed, you wouldl have a feeling of shake. What's more, if someone sneezed or splashed the water, there would be water spilling on you. Don’t you think that it was so fun?

    We left Disney and went to Huizhou to visit my aunt family. My aunt took us to the amusement park which called Dicoco. Dicoco just like Taiwan’s Baby boss.We could choose a career and participate in the actual operation process, to experience the spirit of work, to earn money, and also discretionary income, to learn the real operation of the society. I was very happy in that day. I played a female firefighter, a lawyer, a model, a doctor ect.

  • 7 年前

    小朋友,你這文章該不會是用google翻出來的吧?從頭錯到尾不知道怎麼改!!!

    你要不要考慮認真寫?

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