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請英文高手幫忙批改英文作文「關於水的文章」

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【說明】

水是我們賴以為生不可或缺的物質。 一旦缺少了水, 我們的生活極有可能 陷入困境。寫一篇大約一百個英文字 (words) 與使用水有關的短文。把 文章分成兩段: 第一段說明水帶給人們的好處; 第二段討論如何預防缺水。

  Water is necessary for everyone. The importance of water cannot be overemphasized. It have a great benefit in our daily life. To begin with, we can drink it to quench ours thirst. Second, it can be used to irrigate farmland so that crops can grow healthy and strong. And third, as anything gets dirty, it can help us to wash it cleanly. For these reasons, the advantages of water are so numerous that we must treasure the water resource.   Everyone should manage to come up with some precautions for fear that water shortage. In my opinion, we can do the following things below to make sure of a sufficient supply of water: In case of drought, building reservoirs where water can be stored is the practical way. We can also recycle the water that has been used so that it is fit to use again. Most important of all, we should prevent riverheads from polluting and ensure good properties of water. The surest way to keep the shortage of water is we people must do the measures what is mentioned above distinctly. We can lead a real convenient and comfortable life if we just do it now!

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  • 8 年前
    最佳解答

    修正如下,請參考。

    Water is necessary essential for everyone. The importance of water cannot be underemphasized, because it has a great deal of benefits in for our daily lives. To begin with, we can drink it to quench ours thirst. Second, it can be used to irrigate farmland so that to grow crops can grow to be healthy and strong. And third, as when anything gets dirty, it can help us to wash clean it cleanly. For Like these reasons cases as above, we know that the advantages of water are so numerous and very important, that so we must treasure the water resources.   Everyone should manage to come up with some precautions for the fear that of water shortage. In my opinion, we can do the following things below to make sure of a sufficient supply of water for the normal days and the drought: 1. In case of drought, Building reservoirs at where water can be stored is the practical way. 2. We can also Recycling the water that has been used so that to make it is fit to be used again. 3. The most important of all, we should prevent riverheads from pollution and ensure a good properties quality of water. The surety way to keep the shortage of water away is we people must do perform the measures what which are mentioned above distinctly. Then we can lead live a real convenient and comfortable lives if we just do it now!

    2012-09-19 11:58:31 補充:

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    a real convenient and comfortable lives

    real 改為really

  • WTO
    Lv 5
    8 年前

    Water is a necessity for everyone everyday. It has a ---. --to quench our thirst We can also recycle the waste water and purify it for us to reuse.

  • ♀♂
    Lv 5
    8 年前

    for fear that 要加字句,且句型是for fear that S. (should) V.

    for fear of 才是加V-ing / N.

    2012-09-14 23:40:13 補充:

    The surest way to keep the shortage of water is we people must do the measures what is mentioned above distinctly.

    更改為

    The surest way to prevent/avoid the shortage of water is people must do the measures which/that are mentioned above distinctly.

  • Hsiang
    Lv 5
    8 年前

    Water, is necessary and very importance, which cannot be neglected to people. There are lots of benifit in our daily life. Firstly, we can drink water whlie we feel thirst. Secondly, it also is used to irrigate farmland so that crops grow healthy and strong. Finanlly, it can clean things if anything got dirty as your body. The advantages therefore seem to be so numerous and resource of water should be cherished.

    The shortage need to be considered if it occurs one day. Personally, there are several following things below that we can do to protect the resource of water: In drought, builing reservoirs where water can be stored. We can also recycle the water that has been used so it can be used again. Most of all, a well water system should be set to prevent water pollution and ensuring the quality of water is good. The surest way to reduce the shortage of water is to do the measurements what we have metioned obviously above. We can make a convenient and comfortable life if we just do it now!!!

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    2012-09-14 22:52:05 補充:

    第一句importance改成 important

    2012-09-14 23:07:09 補充:

    第二段中間it also is used to的also 跟is 交換位置...抱歉 先發了才檢查文章

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