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I come from a small township, Houlong in Maoli county. Since 2010 have he gone to Taipei city. So far he is married, having a child.

Doing exercises in his free time is one of his favorite hobbies, especially he likes to playing basketball. The reason is that it keeps him healthy and release his stress. and he also enjoys read books such as econmics, commerce and finance. By remaining learning lets him better little by little.

He obtained the Master of Physics in National Taiwan University in 2009. This was a meaning achievement in his life. Basically, economics is such a interesting subject to him. With studied hard for those years, he enjoyed the process of logic thinking. When he was a graduate school student, My advisor, Prof. Mei Hsu, gave him plentiful skills in writing and organizing essays. During meeting minutes, she told him how to play a useful and leading role in society.

He have taught English and Math in cram school called Ming Young for two years. He works hard for becoming a excellent teacher admired by students and co-wrokers. He takes his job very serious. Before being as a teacher, He had 3 years work experience in Financial industry. He ever took charge of researching, institutional sales and derivatives trading for Security or Futures companies. taking challeges and striving to finish his work brought him job satisfaction in the past. Moveover, He is a loyal, easy-going and optimistic person. Although He have left financial industry for two years, he still belives he can make a contribution to his company.

If he has the fortune to join you, He would urge himself to be a excellent employee by trying every best to fulfill the mission assigned to him. Yearning for getting interview chance and he would prove myself by job performance

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    你好!

    你的英文寫得很好的,僅略作修改如下。

    I come from a small township, Houlong in Maoli county. He has been living in Taipei city since 2010. He is a married man, have one child.

    One of his favourite hobbies is doing exercises in his free time; he especially likes playing basketball. The reason is that it keep him healthy and release stress. He also enjoys reading books in the topic of economics, commerce and finance. Through keep learning new knowledge he made a lot of self-improvement, little by little.

    He obtained Master degree of Physics at National Taiwan University in 2009. This was an important achievement in his life. Economics is such an interesting subject to him and he studied hard during those years; he enjoyed the process of logic thinking. When he was a graduate school student, my advisor, Prof. Mei Hsu, gave him plentiful skills in writing and organizing essays (這裡我不太明白究竟是什麼意思,抱歉!). They have a couple of meetings; she told him how to play a useful and leadership role in society.

    He taught English and Math in a big school called Ming Young for two years. In this job, he worked hard and became an excellent teacher and was admired by both students and co-workers. He always took his job very seriously. Before being a teacher, he had 3 years work experience in finance industry. In that job, he was in charge of researching, institutional sales and derivatives trading for Security or Futures companies. Willing to take challenges made him striving in his work and also brought him great job satisfaction. Moreover, He is a loyal, easy-going and optimistic person. Although he left financial industry for two years, he still believes he can make a contribution to his company.

    If he has the fortune to join you, he will urge himself to be an excellent employee by trying his very best to fulfil the mission assigned to him. Yearning for getting interview chance and he would prove himself by excellent job performance

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