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My role model in my life is my father!Mygradmother was died when my father was forteen years old and my grand fatherwas busy in his job.So he did not have the time to take care him.When I was forteen.If I want to eat candy.Mother will buy that forme.If I want to learn how to play the piano.Mom also teech me.I can not imagethe life my dad had when he is forteen.Howerer, he did not get into a bad child.He madeup on his mind he will take good care of his child.And he did it! He teach me so many things, suchas how to walk, what politeness is, how to deal with various situations atschool.並且他說他不要求我給他什麼回報,只希望我快快樂樂地長大.不管晴天 雨天,白天 黑夜 只要我需要他的時候 他都會出現來幫助我.I think I am very lucky to be his daughter! 我一定是世界上最幸福的女孩!
- 非天使Lv 78 年前最佳解答
My role modelin my life is my father! My grandmother was died when my father was forteenyears oldand my grandfather was busying in with his job. So he did not have the time to take care of him.我的生活角色模範是我的父親，我的祖母在我父親14歲時過世，而我的祖父一直忙於他的工作，而無暇照顧他。
When I was fourteen. If I wanted to eat a candy, my mother will would buy that it for me. If I wanted to learn how to playing the piano, Mom also she would teach me. For these conditions, I really can not imagine the life, without a mother, that my dad had when he is was a fourteen child.當我14歲時，我如果想吃糖果，我母親會買給我，如果想學彃鋼琴，她就會教我，由此些情形，我真的無法想像我父親14歲時沒有母親的生活。
However, he did not get into become a bad child boy, and he made upon his mind he will to take good care of his own child well.然而，他並沒有變成壞孩子，而他決定好好的照顧自己的小孩。
And Then he did made it! He teach had taught me so many things, such as how to walk, what politeness is, how to deal with the various situations at school and so on.之後他做到了，他教過我很多事，像如何走路、什麼是禮貌、如何處理各種在學校裡遇到的情況等等。
And he said he didn't need any return from me, just hoped that I could grow up happily, no matter the day was clear or rainy, day or night, whenever I needed him, he would come to help me, I think I am very lucky to be his daughter! And I believe that I must be the most lucky girl in the world.並且他說他不要求我給他什麼回報,只希望我快快樂樂地長大.不管晴天 雨天,白天 黑夜 只要我需要他的時候 他都會出現來幫助我.I think I am very lucky to be his daughter! 我一定是世界上最幸福的女孩!
2012-11-22 12:19:40 補充：
感謝指點，我改得太勿忙（有其它工作待辦），發生錯誤，如luckiest, 我原先打成luckest, 少了i字，經檢查發現是錯的，臨時又想不出正確的字，因此用了most, 錯了很大，很抱歉。
- Jim-歸鄉樂Lv 78 年前
不好意思, 1. My grandmother was died是不正確的,應為My grandmother died就可以了.
3.that my dad had when he was a fourteen child.此處也不對.
2012-11-22 20:24:37 補充：