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Felicia7 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 8 年前

可以拜託英文高手幫我修改我的英文作文嗎?

If we stand on a body weight scale, we will discover that our weights are more or less than before. If we are heavier than before, we have to think about whether we were eating too much or lacked physical exercise recently. On the other hand, if we find out that we are lighter than before, maybe we have ate less than before or became illness.

There are many kinds of jeans we can wear, the slim fit, the easy fit, and the relax fit. Most of them suit our body shape. When we try them on, we can find out that the part of our bottom and legs are tight or loose than before.

It seems to me that there are some similarities between jeans and body weight scales. No matter we are standing on a body weight scale or trying on a pair of jeans, we will find out that the shape of our body is not as same as before. We will start to think of whether our eating habit is change. Maybe we stayed up late so that our weight changed. Because of body weight scales and jeans, we will start to pay attention to our daily habit.

In our daily lives, we seldom stand on the body weight scale to check our weights but always wear a pair of jeans. Most people are afraid of stand on the body weight scale to discover their weights. In order to keep your body health and to live longer, pay attention to your body weight is a very essential issue.

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  • 8 年前
    最佳解答

    版大您好,也讓Panda try try ㄅ;我會盡量原汁原味的修改;如下

    ( ) 裡為需省略的字; 含底線為修改過的字

    If we stand on a (body weight) scale(前面不需強調body weight, 因為我們一般只會站在這種scale上。)we will discover that we weigh either more or less than before. If we are heavier (than before) , we have to think about whether we are eating too much or have been lacking physical exercise( recently) . On the other hand, if we (find out that we ) are lighter(than before), then maybe we have been eating less (than before ) or we are ill.(請不要一直使用 find out 及 than before,太過重複。)There are many kinds of jeans we can wear: the slim fit, the easy fit, and the relax fit;most of which suit our body shape. When we try them on, we can see that (the part of ) our bottom or legs feel tighter or looser than before.

    It seems to me that there are some similarities between jeans and body weight scale(在無前文下可以用body weight scale). No matter if we stand on a( body weight) scale or trying on a pair of jeans,( we will find out that ) the shape of our body will not be the same as before, which makes us reconsider our eating habit. Maybe we have been staying up late so that our weight changed. Because of(body weight) scale and jeans, we (will start to ) pay attention to our daily habit. In our daily lives(或daily life也可), we seldom stand on the( body weight )scale to check our weight (weight不可用複數)but often(不要用always, 因為有些人不穿牛仔褲) wear (a pair of ) jeans (不需強調a pair, 難不成你穿2條?). Most people are afraid to stand on the (body weight) scale to discover their weight. In order to keep your body healthy and (to) live longer, paying attention to your (body) weight is (a very) essential (issue).

    整合如下:

    寫不下 = - = 其他寫在意見欄...

    2012-12-14 09:22:15 補充:

    If we stand on a scale, we will discover that we weigh either more or less than before. If we are heavier, we have to think about whether we are eating too much or have been lacking physical exercise. On the other hand, if we are lighter, then maybe we have been eating less or we are ill .

    2012-12-14 09:22:32 補充:

    There are many kinds of jeans we can wear: the slim fit, the easy fit, and the relax fit;most of which suit our body shape. When we try them on, we can see that our bottom or legs feel tighter or looser than before.

    2012-12-14 09:22:48 補充:

    It seems to me that there are some similarities between jeans and body weight scale. No matter if we stand on a scale or trying on a pair of jeans, the shape of our body will not be the same as before, which makes us reconsider our eating habit.

    2012-12-14 09:23:09 補充:

    Maybe we have been staying up late so that our weight changed. Because of scale and jeans, we pay attention to our daily habit. In our daily lives, we seldom stand on the scale to check our weight but often wear jeans. Most people are afraid to stand on the scale to discover their weight.

    2012-12-14 09:23:16 補充:

    In order to keep your body health and live longer, paying attention to your weight is essential.

    2012-12-14 09:24:04 補充:

    學英文不只背單字記文法, 最重要的是要有邏輯…

    希望有幫到您…

    2012-12-14 10:07:10 補充:

    Sorry, 第5欄應該是 ...

    In order to keep your body "healthy" = - =

    2012-12-14 23:31:42 補充:

    Master Chen

    Kind [ +1 ]

    2012-12-14 23:46:05 補充:

    請將第2欄 ......and the relax fit後面的 ; 改成 ,

    the slim fit, the easy fit, and the relax fit(,)

    參考資料: Eat, drink, and sleep English...
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  • chen
    Lv 7
    8 年前

    Flirty Panda

    good [ +1 ]

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  • 8 年前

    When we stand on a body weight scale, we can see our weight changes all the

    time. If we are heavier than before, we have to think about whether or not we’ve been eating too much or lacking exercises. Vice versa, when we find out that our weight appears lighter than before, we may have been eating less than usual or sick.

    There are many kinds of jeans we can wear such as the slim, easy, or relax fit. In general, we fit in most of them. When we try them on, we can see how tight and loose based on the feeling of our bottom and legs.

    It seems like there are some similarities between jeans and body weight scales in terms of diagnosing our health. Stepping on a weight scale or trying on a jeans can both find out the fact that the shape of our body is no longer the same as before.

    People seldom go on the body weight scale to check our weights, but always wear a pair of jeans. Lots of people are scared of looking at their weight, and they just

    ignore it. In order to keep your body healthy and live longer, please pay more

    attention on your body weight which delivers a strong and essential evidence

    regarding your health.

    參考資料: =D
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