RJ 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 7 年前

"修改新文件"英文該怎麼說

煩請先賢/達人/ 指導, 這樣的句子該怎麼寫 ?

這是我新修正的PI, 修正處是按照您要求去更改

為 ITEM 1234 與 4567

Herewith, please see attached proforma invoice, and the revised portion lies (puts)in the change of item 1234 and item 4567 per advised (per your request)

我這裡用了動詞 LIES, 感覺不是很好, 它讓我想到 說謊,.請問大德還可以怎麼用, 可以讓這樣的文句美化,謝謝您 Orz...Orz...Orz 不才磕頭如搗蒜...

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Further how to tell the difference among revise, amend and modify ?

2 個已更新項目:

羅莉大師, 謝謝您撥冗回覆。

不才受教於心, 請教您該如何辨別 revise, modify and amend ?

謝謝您

3 個已更新項目:

修正的字多,我所知道的是 一般文件修正/打錯字/修改..等等都是用 revise 這個字比較多,

amend 多半是用在重要的文件,條文修正,例如 L/C amendment, Order amendment.

modify 是用在樣品,模具,例如修模: Dies modification.

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  • 羅莉
    Lv 7
    7 年前
    最佳解答

    商業書信最忌用字冗長

    您可以避免像 "the revised portion lies in the change of item 1234 and

    item 4567"這樣的表達.

    此外, herewith不適合與attached搭配, 要嘛就用Attached hereto is......

    或是Enclosed herewith please find.....

    建議改寫如下:

    Attached is the new proforma invoice where Items 1234 and 4567 are

    revised as per your request.

    Attached後加個hereto, 悉聽尊便.

    參考資料: 羅莉 - 商業書信資深經驗
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  • 7 年前

    這三個字大半時候是通用的,都是『更改』之意。用在你這句子都可以。

    反倒是你句型上需要多琢磨:

    1. A lies in B. 是標準句型。英美人士不會把這裏 lie 解讀誤讀成『說謊』。你根本多慮了。

    2. 簡潔寫法:Please see attached proforma invoice for revisions in items 1234 and 4567 (according to your request).

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  • 7 年前

    Dear Master DaSaGwa

    Can you tell something about revise, amend and modify ?

    I was told revised is used for my little change, like the correction on documents.

    As to amend, it is used for documennts of importance, like L/C amendment.

    Order amendment.

    2012-12-14 14:09:15 補充:

    As to modify, it is roughly being used for the proudcts or specification standard.

    Appreciate if you could advise me anytime at your convenience.

    2012-12-17 09:38:51 補充:

    多謝 羅莉大師/ALLEN 大師 與 DSG 大師的指導

    Orz...Orz...Orz

    不才磕頭如搗蒜

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  • 7 年前

    修改新文件

    這是我新修正的PI, 修正處是按照您要求去更改

    為 ITEM 1234 與 4567

    Modify the new filePI this is my new amendments, amendments are in accordance with your request to changeFor the ITEM and 1234

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  • 7 年前

    the revised portion lies (puts)in the change of item 1234 and item 4567 per advised (per your request)

    ==>

    Per your request, item 1234 and 4567 have been revised

    2012-12-14 13:21:07 補充:

    item ==> items

    2012-12-14 14:31:50 補充:

    -revising is looking at something again and changing or rectifying if necessary,

    -modifying is changing something, technical or literal

    -altering is changing something, more likely to be behaviour

    -amend is correcting or improving a mistake.

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