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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 8 年前

請幫忙中翻英:國外高中申請表家長寫作

我們家兒子目前在申請國外的高中,學生寫作的部分他會自己完成,我的英文真的很不好,家長的問答我只能先寫出中文,懇請各位幫幫忙『中翻英』,感激不盡!

Q: Please use the space below to help us get to know the applicant better, by commenting on his/her interests, activities, achievements, challenges, personality and/or character.

Eric自小就展現出對於數學與音樂的強烈興趣。他從三歲就學習鋼琴至今,目前已經通過YAMAHA六級檢定,並曾參加二次縣級音樂大賽獲得銀牌,其中一次還是與音樂班的學生一同競賽,足見他擁有精湛的鋼琴演奏能力;從中學至今,Eric曾多次參加國內外各項數學與科學競賽,並曾分別於2010與2011年獲得International Mathematics Contest, Singapore銀牌,以及於2012年獲得Asia International Mathematical Olympiad Open Contest, Hong-Kong 金牌獎。

他以優異的學業成績被新興國中推薦參加武陵高中科學班甄選,這是教育部核准於全國七所高中所設立,以培育數理成績優異的資優生,根據甄選條件的規定,學生必須是各校前10%的學生始可參加筆試,這次考試有來自台灣總計約900人參加筆試,筆試僅率取60人參加由中央大學教授群組成的口試委員會,最終僅錄取30人,Eric最後以綜合成績第13名進入科學班就讀。

他是個樂觀開朗的小孩,並且善解人意與知道如何關懷他人,這從他接受教育至今,經常協助師長輔導其他同學課業,以及扮演協調師生關係的角色獲得驗證;此外,他也總是個領導者,例如9年級時,他號召另外三位同學組隊參加Junior High-School Mathematics Competition,全台灣總計七百多隊參賽,他們在強敵環伺下最終擠進總決賽,在這過程中,他們都曾想過放棄,因為冗長且困難的比賽,對於這些小孩來說是深具挑戰性的,所幸Eric總是會想起父親從小每次競賽時告訴他的:「你是全世界最棒的小孩」這句話,讓他也激勵同學們努力完成最後的比賽,最終他們的隊伍獲得銅牌,我們深信獲獎並非參賽的目的,這個過程才是他們學習的目的。

生活自主能力方面是Eric需要再多付出努力學習的部分,畢竟家中就他一位小孩,與一般傳統的中國家庭一樣,我們總是會有些不捨。由於他自小常與父親一同沉浸在看書的樂趣中,因此,他在家中除了經常協助父親整理藏書外,並不常接觸家事,赴美讀書後,我們相信他必須付出比較多的時間,來學習如何照顧自己的生活起居;此外,語言也是他必須再加強的部分,畢竟在美國求學,聽說讀寫的能力都必須再加強。

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  • 8 年前
    最佳解答

    第一二段

    Eric had always demonstrated keen interest in mathematics and music. He from three age on learning piano has, currently has through YAMAHA six level verification, and has participate in II times County music contest obtained silver, which a also is and music class of students together race, shows he has superb of piano played capacity; from middle school has, Eric has repeatedly participate in both at home and abroad the mathematics and science race, and has respectively Yu 2010 and 2011 obtained International Mathematics Contest, Singapore silver medal, and in 2012 the Asia International Mathematical Olympiad Open Contest, Hong-Kong Gold Award.

    He to excellent of academic results is emerging country in the recommended participate in Wuling high school science Ban Zhenxuan, this is Ministry of education approved Yu national seven by high school by established, to cultivation mathematical results excellent of funding eugenics, according to selection conditions of provides, students must is the school Qian 10% of students began can participate in written, this examination has from Taiwan total about 900 people participate in written, written only rate take 60 people participate in by Central University Professor group composition of oral Committee, eventually only admitted 30 people, Eric last 13th place with integrated into science class.

    2012-12-21 18:45:24 補充:

    第三段

    He is a optimistic cheerful of child, and good solutions satisfactory and know how care others, this from he accept education has, often assist teachers counselling other students academic, and played coordination teachers and students relationship of role

    2012-12-21 18:45:36 補充:

    obtained validation; in addition, he also always a leader, such as 9 years level Shi, he call also three bit students team participate in Junior High-School Mathematics

    Competition, full Taiwan total more than 700 more team entries, They in enemies ring

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  • 8 年前

    too good to be true.

    Although all parents are presumed to be biased, I would rather see a more balanced input. Many students got admitted by honest discussion of:

    1. weaknesses and how to overcome them;

    2. strengths and how to harness them

    you covered half of item 2.

    2012-12-21 22:50:39 補充:

    I think all educators have a dream to:

    make their students better for good feedbacks to our society.

    Eric is so good already that even I cannot make him better.

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  • 匿名使用者
    8 年前

    我可不可以建議版大花點小錢去找專業的翻譯....畢竟孩子申請學校是大事,不可掉以輕心。

    請容我在建議一句~~妳的文太長了,學校基本上希望大約在300~500字之間的essay,admission committee未必有興趣看完全文。Be concise and precise!

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  • 8 年前

    You might want to break your essay into 4 or 5 parts, and ask one part in each question. Then you might have a good chance to get someone to translation it nicely.

    2012-12-21 12:59:48 補充:

    The reason I suggest this is because for such a long essay, it is likely to be removed later. Also, when it is translated into English, it might NOT fit in the limitation in words that system has set.

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  • 羅莉
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    8 年前

    翻譯是辛苦的工作, 要翻譯得優美更是不容易, 大量內容(超過5行)隨意丟到YK+英文區徵求翻譯是違反版規的, 只會招來翻譯機呼攏您. 或許會遇上一時技癢的高手, 但別抱太大的期望.

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  • 8 年前

    Eric had always demonstrated keen interest in mathematics and music. He from three age on learning piano has, currently has through YAMAHA six level verification, and has participate in II times County music contest obtained silver, which a also is and music class of students together race, shows he has superb of piano played capacity; from middle school has, Eric has repeatedly participate in both at home and abroad the mathematics and science race, and has respectively Yu 2010 and 2011 obtained International Mathematics Contest, Singapore silver medal, and in 2012 the Asia International Mathematical Olympiad Open Contest, Hong-Kong Gold Award.

    He to excellent of academic results is emerging country in the recommended participate in Wuling high school science Ban Zhenxuan, this is Ministry of education approved Yu national seven by high school by established, to cultivation mathematical results excellent of funding eugenics, according to selection conditions of provides, students must is the school Qian 10% of students began can participate in written, this examination has from Taiwan total about 900 people participate in written, written only rate take 60 people participate in by Central University Professor group composition of oral Committee, eventually only admitted 30 people, Eric last 13th place with integrated into science class.

    字數有限ㄛ

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