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希望能幫我修改這篇英文文章(20點 急迫)

The famous story about Christmas might be ‘’The little match girl’’. This story is talking about an unhappy single parent family. The little girl lives with her father and her grandmother in an old house. After little girl’s grandmother die, her father begins to drink and hit her. He also forced little girl to sell matches to buy wine in cold winter.

In a frigid day, little girl sells no match and she feels hungry and cold. Little girl lights the first match and sees many foods. She is very surprise and lights second match immediately. The little girl notices that she is surrounded with Christmas tree, presents and friends. After she lights the third match, the little girl see her grandmother.

Second day, people find that a girl lie in snow without breathe, but has smile on her face.

禮拜一就要用了>_<真的很謝謝...希望能把不通順及能變得更好的句子都加上去,篇幅字數不限,但要提升文章的精緻度Q__Q

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  • 8 年前
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    The famous story about Christmas might be "The little match seller." This was a story about a girl who tried to made a living to support her unfortunate single parent family. The little girl lived with her father and her grandmother in a shabby house. After her grandmother passed away, her father was overcome with grief and began drinking excessively to stay away from depression. But a man who used to be a kind father became ill-tempered. He beat up the little girl unreasonably.

    On Christmas eve, the little girl sold matches in some snow-clad streets. No one noticed her, so she hadn't sold a box of the matches all day. In such a frigid day, she was only in rags with bare feet. She felt quite hungry and her body was stiff with cold. She sat down against a wall and lit up a match to chase coldness away. Surprisingly, she magically saw much food in flames. But the illusion disappeared immediately as the match burned away. She lit up the second match and even more wonderful magics happened. She saw that she was surrounded by Christmas trees, presents and friends;likewise, the magic faded away as the flame went out. She lit up the third match, and this time she saw her grandmother whom she has missed so much. To avoid her grandmother disappearing, she lit up one match after another. She plead desperately in hope of staying with her grandmother forever.

    The next day, people found a little girl lying in snow without breath but with smile on her face. She has reached the heaven and led a happy life with her dear grandmother forever.

    希望有幫到你^ ^

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  • Ed
    Lv 6
    8 年前

    1、既然是故事,說的都是以前的事,動詞應該以用過去式為主。

    2、建議第一句改成 "One of the famous stories ... is ..."

    3、在很多地方"little girl"前面的定冠詞the不可省略。

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