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幫檢查英文心得文法~急!!

這是我寒假作業要求的英文心得 想請各位大大幫忙我檢查一下文法並幫我修正

如果能幫我把文章變的更優美那更謝謝^^~

THE WITCHES

This is the first time I read the English novel, although my heart was full of fear before I challenged it. And at first I read it difficulty, but all getting better after I read the whole book. Because I able to almost understand the contents and keynotes of the story.

My favorite character in this book is the little boy. Because I think that he has a fascinating charm, his dialogues are the children say child language all the time, I was attracted by his innocence, and when he heard his grandmother said the witches stories, showing the cowardice which he has make me feel that he is so cute, too! This is why I think he is my favorite character in this novel first.

Next, the little boy exuded another charm that is mature. When he turned into a rat, he did not give up in his life, there were always more cheerful and optimistic attitudes to look at this accident. He even though felt that it was very good when he turned into a rat by the witch. Because he became very carefree and relaxed. I was drawn by his positive thinking.

I can not believe in such a small role can bring me these feelings. Because this novel makes me touch deeply. That is when we encountered adversity in our life, do not use negative attitude to give up. Instead, we have to use a positive attitude to solve everything, and at this moment you will find that the things seem to be easier! So, remember this faith and practice it at every moment in the future!

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  • 8 年前
    最佳解答

    不好意思,單純路過幫你看看寫的內容..

    第一段我改編完了..但這本書我沒有看過....

    加上有些部份像是中文直接翻成英文....

    所以你寫的某些句子我看的不是很懂..

    e.g

    his dialogues are the children say child language all the time.

    (他的對白是這群小孩一直說小孩語言??)

    he heard his grandmother said the witches stories

    (他祖母說的女巫們的故事是說一則故事還是很多則故事?)

    你補充說明心得中文的部份嗎?

    不然可能要麻煩有看過的人幫你改了..@@

    2013-02-17 14:30:30 補充:

    This is my first time to read English novel, so I think it is a challenge for me. I was full of fear before I have started to read it. At first, I think it was difficult for me to read English novel; however it did not last long. Gradually, I was getting better and better. In no time, I was almost able to understand the contents and keynotes of the story.

    這是我首次閱讀英文小說,所以我認為這對我而言是個挑戰。在我開始讀它之前,我充滿了畏懼。一開始,我認為讀英文小說對我而言很困難,然而,這個想法並不持久。逐漸的我漸入佳境。不久,我幾乎能理解故事中的章節內容主旨。

    In this book, my favorite character is the little boy. I thought that he has a fascinating charm with his childlike personality, and I was attracted by it. In addition, when he listened to the witches stories that his grandmother said, he showed his cowardice which made me feel that he was so cute. It is the reason why I think he is my favorite character in this novel.

    在這本書中,我最喜愛的角色是那個小男孩。我想他有著迷人的魅力在於他天真純樸的特質,而我被這個特質所吸引。另外,當他聽著他外婆說的故事,他展現了他的膽怯讓我感覺到他很可愛。這是為何我認為他是我在這個小說中最喜愛的角色的原因。

    Next, besides, the little boy exuded a mature personality. When he was turned into a rat, he did not give up and depress. He always kept his mind on optimistic attitudes to face the accident; moreover, because he became very carefree and relaxed, he even thought that it was a very good thing for him when he was turned into a rat by the witch. I was drawn to him by his positive thought.

    接著,此外,這個小男孩散發著成熟的個人特質。當他被變成了一隻田鼠,他並沒有放棄和沮喪。他總是保持著樂觀的態度去面對這起意外。甚至,因為他變的非常無憂無慮、輕鬆自在,他甚至認為當他被女巫變成了田鼠,這對他而言是非常好的事。

    The novel is touching my heart deeply. Originally, I can hardly imagine that such a small role can bring me these feelings. When we encountered adversity in our life, we should not give up easily with a negative attitude. Instead, we have to create and use a positive attitude to solve everything difficult. At this moment, you will find that the things seem to be easier than you think before. So, we have to keep the faith in mind and practice it at every moment in the future!

    2013-02-17 14:37:40 補充:

    最後一段中文我就不打了....字數超過限制..

    2013-02-17 14:39:45 補充:

    我算是英文初心者.. 有盡量把內容改的通順一點了..

    2013-02-18 03:33:48 補充:

    第一段的「At first, I think」,改成「At first, I thought」接後面過去式的句子,才不會有時態上的問題,再麻煩你改一下~^^

    第二段他外婆說故事給他的那句,「that his grandmother said」,改成「that his grandmother told to.」應該比較好..說故事的說是用tell..@@

    第四段:Originally, I can..整句裡面兩個can.. 改成「I could」..

    希望現在跟你說還來得及改....@@

    參考資料: me, me, me
  • 8 年前

    非常感謝喔~你舉的那兩句怪怪例子

    第一句其實我是想表達:他的對話總是會童言童語(但是我不曉得怎麼翻)

    第二句是說很多則故事

    (其他或許還有很多句子...因為英文作文是我的障礙...)

    http://www.eslite.com/product.aspx?pgid=1003162291...

    這邊有大概的內容簡介 可以看看是否對你幫我修改有幫助

    因為是明天急著要的 所以中文心得可能就來不及補上來了

    其實如果你願意的話 只要幫我大概將錯的很嚴重的句子改對

    然後稍微讓文章更順就ok了 非常感謝你喔^^

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