英文作文 希望路過高手指點迷津

以下是我之前寫的英文作文 老師有提到部分文法、單字的使用有問題 但沒有點出問題所在 希望有英文高手能夠點出問題所在 也希望能夠把焦點放在「文法」、「單字」上就好(組織、內容暫且不論) 大概點出明顯的錯誤即可 不用一句一句說明 也不用改寫美化 希望路過高手能夠不吝指導一下 謝謝 Boys versus Girls The major distinction between boys and girls doesn’t only lie on body but in personality. People have been affected by the... 顯示更多 以下是我之前寫的英文作文

老師有提到部分文法、單字的使用有問題

但沒有點出問題所在

希望有英文高手能夠點出問題所在

也希望能夠把焦點放在「文法」、「單字」上就好(組織、內容暫且不論)

大概點出明顯的錯誤即可 不用一句一句說明 也不用改寫美化

希望路過高手能夠不吝指導一下 謝謝

Boys versus Girls

The major distinction between boys and girls doesn’t only lie on body but in personality. People have been affected by the environments since they are a baby and so they just act to live up with the expectations of the society. The differences in personality can be observed both on their demeanor and the pattern of thought.

While boys spend less than ten minutes to take a shower, girls spend more than thirty minutes. It’s because boys are prone to do multiple tasks simultaneously and girls prefer to do only one task at once.

Boys always overestimate themselves, which could be learned by the fact that when the boys look at themselves in the mirror, they always think they are good-looking. Moreover, when facing some difficulties, which may even jeopardize their lives, they trust that they would live through it and then carry it out. Of course, the case is different when it comes to girls.

When chatting with friends, boys tend to phrase their sentences with informal words, and girls relatively formal words. For instance, while meeting friends, girls may say, “Oh, dear! You don’t know how much I miss you,” and boys might say, “How come you aren’t dead?” This is the reason why boys are not good at comforting their depressed friends.

Boys are more simple-minded than girls. That is, girls are more sentimental. When meeting friends, girls love to talk about what’s on their minds and boys concentrate on behavioral interaction instead of spiritual intercourse. Girls are more likely to commit suicide when getting upset. However, they usually don’t succeed, because they don’t really want to die, but to draw people’s attention. In spite of the fact that boys are less emotional, should they commit suicide, they are very likely to succeed.
更新: There are still countless examples, which are too many to be listed one by one. Of course, not every boy or girl meets what have been mentioned above, for everyone has their own backgrounds. A girl could be masculine and a boy could be effeminate as well.
更新 2: Generally speaking, everyone has their own feature, and the feature will blend in with the society. And, ultimately, that is who we are now.
更新 3: 字數有點多 可惜只能給20點 希望路過高手能夠指導一下

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