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When I was a little girl, I very want a pet. But my mother agreed not that, she thought me too young to bear the responsibility. Thus, I didn't mention this request again.

A day, when I playing in park, a small cat appeared suddenly. It is so cute and attract my notice. I decided to support it so I hold it go home.

After I enter the house, my mother was surprise and ask me why carry a group cats go back. Then I found three cats followed back.

Although feeding four cats looks like difficult, I persuade my mother let me try. At first, everything is going well, but four cats getting naughty. Them make mess at home and scratch my sofa. Because this, my mother was very angry and told me can't continue to feed them. Heard this, I was so sad and lead them leave. Finally, a kind-hearted neighbor sheltered them.

After years, I have grown and have own pet. Thinking of those cats, I not only sorry but also thank them give me a lesson - Think twice.

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Think twice 我記得是"三思而後行",不知道對不對

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  • 8 年前
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    When I was little, I really wanted a pet. However, my mom did not allow me to get one because I was not mature and responsible enough to take care of a pet. Since then, I never mentioned about it again.

    One day, when I was playing in a park, I found a stray kitten unexpectedly. It was so adorable, so I decided to take it home. When I stepped into the house, my mom was surprised and questioned me about the poor kitten. After a quite long time of convincing my mom, she finally gave up and letting me to pet it.

    Knowing that my mom could not argue over me about having cats, so I brought back three more cats in the following days.

    Although feeding four cats looked difficult in the beginning, I still persuade my mom to give me a try. At first, everything was going well, but four little

    kitties became naughty. They made a huge mess at home and even scratched my sofa. Because my mom could not stand them anymore, so she forced me

    to give them away. Even though I was reluctant, I still listened to my mom, and gave them to a kind-hearted neighbor.

    As time passes by, I have grown much and have my own pets now. Even

    now, I am still thankful of having them before because they taught me a life

    lesson that (*)

    (*) : 你的結尾我不是很明白。所以你先用中文補上你所說的"lesson" 的意思吧:D

    中間我有稍微幫你修改了一些句子,因為你表達的意思不構具體,所以如果你不是這個意思在跟我說吧。

    整體來講還不錯,就是用詞和文法有些問題。

    2013-07-07 07:42:54 補充:

    uhhhhh......雖然不知道你為什麼要說三思而後行,但是我還是幫你家吧 ! 抱歉,回答晚了

    As time passes by, I have grown much and have my own pets now. Even

    now, I am still thankful of having them before because they taught me a life

    lesson that think before you act.

    參考資料: myselft, me :D
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