葉子 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 6 年前

請幫忙我修改英文心得(小精靈與鞋匠)

這是我第一次寫出來的心得,

感覺故事內容大綱太長,可是也不知道怎麼改,

而且自己的感想好像也寫太少,希望可以幫我改。

The Elves and the Shoemaker is a warm story. Once long ago, there lived a shoemaker and his wife. They are very kind and generous, but he led a very poor life.

One day, a home less girl came into his shop. She desperately needed a pair of shoes, so the shoemaker generously gave her his last pair of shoes. One night, the shoemaker dreamed the best pair of shoes in his life. Next morning, the pair of shoes was on his workbench, and sold a lot of money. Then every morning there will be a pair of shoes on the workbench, the shoemaker and his wife decided to see who was making these shoes. They saw two elves making these shoes. To express their gratitude, the couple decided to make them little sweaters. The elves was very happy. They had helped the shoemaker and his wife because they was very kind and generous. Although the elves never returned after that night, the couple felt blessed and continued their work by helping people.

The story is very warm. The couple is very generous and helpful. The story tell us we should be thankful, and help the other people who need help.

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育瑄:

我的意思大概就是這樣沒錯,

可是我要問的是,

這篇文章的文法應該還是有錯吧,

那可以幫我想一下哪裡還要改進嗎?

謝謝

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  • 6 年前
    最佳解答

    "The Elves and the Shoemaker" is a warm story. Once upon a time, there lived a shoemaker and his wife. They are very kind and generous, but they lived a very poor life.

    One day, a homeless girl came into his shop. She desperately needed a pair of shoes, so the shoemaker generously gave her his last pair of shoes. One night, the shoemaker dreamed that he made the best pair of shoes in his life. Next morning, the pair of shoes was on his workbench, and it was sell out with a lot of money. Then, every morning there will be a new pair of shoes on the workbench, the shoemaker and his wife decided to see who was making these shoes. They saw two elves making these shoes. To express their gratitude, the couple decided to make them little sweaters. The elves was very happy. Although the elves never returned after that night, the couple felt blessed and continued their work by helping people.

    The story is very touching. The couple is very generous and helpful. The story tell us we should be thankful, and help the other people who need help.

    在這故事大綱裡generous 出現得太頻繁

    建議可以換成generous 的同義字:

    beneficent, benevolent, big, bounteous, bountiful, charitable, considerate, easy, equitable, excellent, fair, greathearted, helpful, honorable, hospitable, kind, kindhearted, kindly, lavish, liberal, lofty, loose, magnanimous, moderate, munificent, noble, open-handed, philanthropic, prodigal, profuse, reasonable, soft-touch, thoughtful, tolerant, ungrudging, unselfish, unsparing, unstinting, willing

    感想是有一點少

    您可以加一些幫助別人之後會有回報之類的

    也可以加一些你看完這故事之後你想法和行動上的的改變

    希望您對我的回答滿意 ^^

    參考資料: 我和網路
  • 6 年前

    精靈和鞋匠是一個溫暖的故事。一旦不久前,住著一個鞋匠和他的妻子。他們都非常善良,慷慨,但他率領一個非常貧窮的生活。

    有一天,一個家少女孩走進他的店鋪。她迫切需要一雙鞋,所以鞋匠慷慨地給了她他的最後一雙鞋。一天晚上,鞋匠的夢想在他的生活中最好的一雙鞋。第二天早上,一雙鞋子是在他的工作台上,賣了不少錢。然後每天早上會有一對在工作台上的鞋,鞋匠和他的妻子決定,看看誰是這雙鞋。他們看到了這雙鞋的兩個精靈。為了表達自己的感激之情,夫妻倆決定讓他們的小毛衣。精靈們感到非常高興。他們幫助鞋匠和他的妻子,因為他們是非常善良和慷慨。雖然精靈們再也沒有回到那個夜晚之後,這對夫妻感到祝福和幫助的人繼續他們的工作。

    故事很溫暖。這對夫妻是非常慷慨和樂於助人。這個故事告訴我們,我們應該感恩,並幫助那些需要幫助的其他人。

    你的意思是這樣嗎?

    是的話我覺得還不錯喔~

    參考資料: google翻譯
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