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鈜智 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 6 年前

全球暖化 Global Warning

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How does Global Warming affect human beings?

How does Global Warming affect human beings? Global warming is not effects that was centuries later, it is already affecting our lives. Humans are causing global warming and we are suffering as a result, and the consequences will only get heavier.

Climatic changes by global warming can bring in their wake extreme conditions like huge storms, drought and floods and can be of immediate threat to life. The effects of global warming are strongest at the poles. Ice all over the world is melting. The melting ice increases the sea level and cause flooding in low areas. The increased temperatures are not only melting icebergs and glaciers, it is also causing animals to migrate to different areas or die, upsetting ecosystems, and it is also changing precipitation patterns.

What we can do as we are Global Citizens to Save our Planet and Save ourselves is we need to take steps to control global temperatures from reaching dangerously high levels. We can do our own bit by helping out and some of the measures include: First, Using less fossil fuels and electricity – switch off lights, fans, air-conditioners, computers etc. when not required .Second, Recycling paper, plastics and whatever we can and planting more trees.

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  • 6 年前
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    我覺得你寫得不錯,看得出有用心、認真在寫。我的修改除了以訂正文法為主,還稍修飾不太順的語氣或語句。行文結構就不予更動。

    How Global Warming Affects Human Beings (標題不宜寫成問句,作者的重點在闡述解釋,不是「問天」)How does global warming affect human beings? Global warming is not a phenomenon that is yet to come centuries later, it is happening now. Humans are causing global warming and we are suffering as a result. If we don't take actions, the consequences will only get worse.

    Climatic changes by global warming can bring in their wake extreme conditions like huge storms, drought and floods, which can be of immediate threat to life. The effects of global warming are strongest at the poles. Icebergs and glaciers are melting at faster speed than they used to be. Sea level thus rises and causes flooding in low areas. (這裡的動詞 cause 前面已出現過,建議你去查 thesaurus, 輸入 cause, 看能找出其它相關的動詞代替) In addition to geographic impact, higher temperature changes precipitation pattern that directly impacts animals migration away from the habitats, upsetting ecosystems eventually.

    As global citizens on the one and only Planet Earth, we need to take steps to control global temperatures from rising to dangerously high levels. We can do our own part by taking measures including using less fossil fuels and electricity, consuming less energy by switching off electronic appliances during off hours, recycling resources to save more trees. As Rome wasn't built in a day, global warming may not be cured in a year. Let's take one step at a time, slowly but surely, to save our children from the worsening effects of global warming.

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