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匿名使用者 發問時間: 教育與參考考試 · 7 年前

英檢作文批改

不好意思麻煩英文版的大大了

小弟最近準備去考中高級複試

上次只差寫作沒過

所以近期多多包含啦XD

不要只是批改阿~~~

也請給個評分+建議

批評我也接受 XD

1.中翻英

隨身聽最大的好處就是讓人可以隨時隨地聽音樂和廣播節目。

無論在慢跑或等公車時,你如果覺得無聊便可以聽音樂以消磨時間。

甚至想開大音量,也不會影響他人。但是有的醫生卻開始擔心,如果

養成長時間聽隨身聽的習慣,聽力受損的人會越來越多。

The best advantage of a walker is that is allows people to listen to music and radio programs anytime and anywhere. Whenever you are jogging or waiting for a bus, you can kill time by listening to music if feeling bored. Better yet, it won't disturb others if your increase the volume. However, some doctors start to worry that more and more

people will suffer from listening loss if they form the habit of listening to a walker for a long time.

2. 寫作 (150-180字)

圖片參考:https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/47462659/Quest...

Kevin C. Liu

No. 20 Dali St., 3F

Chungho, Taipei

April 3, 2000

Formosa Features Magazine

36 Sanmin Road

Yungho City, Taipei

Dear Sir/Madam:

  My name is Kevin C. Liu. For the sake of economic recession, I just got the sack last month. Now I am pounding the pavement in search of another computer programming job.

  Seeing the advertisement of your company, I have an interest in it since there is a job offer for computer programmer. Basically, I apply for this position for two reasons. First of all, since I have passion for computer programming, it is always in my blood, acting as my forte. Second, I'd worked for my previous company for more than five years. Therefore, I have experience in this job. That is, everything about computer programming will absolutely be under my control. Though I just got laid off, I'm not going to take this lying down. Instead, I will exert myself to it.

  Brimming with confidence rather than having butterflies in my stomach, I am all set to get qualified. After qualification, I am expecting NT$70,000 per month and read to start my work in three days. I'm looking forward to hear from you. Thank you for your time and attention.

Sincerely,

Kevin C. Liu

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痾... 不方便批改嗎 = =?....

我真的很怕碰到這樣的回答耶 = =

3 個解答

評分
  • 7 年前
    最佳解答

    Your essay has a lot of informal and negative words/phrases/sentences. In formal cover letters, you should avoid informal language and any negative content. You also have quite a lot of basic grammar errors. I suggest you brush up your grammar.

    ==========================================

    Let me show you an example of a better opening:

    My name is Kevin C. Liu. I have recently graduated from my master's in xxx, so I am looking for computer programming positions. I came across your advertisement for a computer programmer and I would like to show you how my qualifications meet your needs precisely.

    ==========================================

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    7 年前

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