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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 6 年前

幫我看一下英文自傳~~~~~~

幫我改一下看有哪裡不順的嗎~感恩囉~

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My father is an architect and my mother is a manager.(零售商經理?)

I have a happy family with open-minded parents and a life with affluent materials.

Well, I think I'm very outgoing by nature. I like being with people and working with them.

Although my schoolwork load was heavy, I still kept a balance between my studies and extracurricular activities.

I am a mature person and I am confident that I can pursue my goals. In order to achieve them, I accept all challenges and never give up.

After university education, hope I can do my best whatever work alone or team work.

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  • 6 年前
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    My father is an architect and my mother is a manager.(零售商經理?)

    (...a manager at a retail shop)

    I have a happy family with open-minded parents and a life with affluent materials.

    My parents are open-minded and they have been working hard to make the family affluent.

    I think I'm outgoing by nature. I like being with people and working with them.

    Although my schoolwork load is heavy, I still keep a balance between my studies and extracurricular activities.

    I am a mature person and I am confident that I "will achieve" my goals. In order to "accomplish" them, I accept all challenges and never give up.

    After graduation, I hope I can do my best no matter I work on my own or with others.

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  • Beth
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    6 年前

    1. my mother is a retailer manager. 比較簡潔

    2. I have a happy family with open-minded parents and a life with affluent materials.用這句一搜尋居然是自傳寫作範本的句子, 還一堆'中國人'用. 不知道該笑還是該哭.

    2013-12-30 04:25:21 補充:

    第五句你說, I am confident that I can pursue my goals

    然後最後一句你寫 I hope I can do my best. 我聽起來就很怪.

    盡全力是你可以控制的, 如果你有自信, 就應該寫 I will 而不是 I hope.

    2013-12-30 04:41:42 補充:

    I will do my best whatever I do. (前面不用加 after ..., 難道你畢業前就不盡全力嗎?)

    或是加上 at work, 來讓after graduation句意完整: After graduation, I will do my best at work, no matter working alone or working in a team.

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