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請英文高手幫忙批改英文作文「和睦相處」

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題目:請寫一篇英文作文,文分兩段,第一段說明與別人和睦相處的重要性;第二段表達自己在日常生活中如何與人和睦相處。

It is important to get good along with others. Those who tend to have the conflict with other people may cause harm to others. Once injury roots in other’s mind, it’s extremely hard to eliminate. They then look down on each other. In the future, even though the one of them get into big trouble, the other one won’t give him or her any hand. Conversely, if people treat people with a good manner, everything will be a completely different story. They have good impression on each other. Perhaps, if they interact much further, they will find mutual hobbies and be good friends.

There are many tips for treating people. First, always be polite. Let others know we are kind people. While meeting classmates or friends on way home, do not forget greet them with an amiable smile. Secondly, try to think for others more. No one likes a selfish person. The more emphasis is put on other people’s opinions or idea, the more likely our words will be respected. If any collision happens, stay calm and take patience to communicate with people rather than adopt violence or verbal abused. Getting good along with everyone is not easy to achieve, yet it is worth taking our efforts to do.

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  • 6 年前
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    It is important to get along with others.

    (get along已經有相處融洽的意思,不需再加good)

    Those who tend to have conflicts with other people may cause harm to others.

    (the conflict改成conflicts,因為這裡並不是指特定某一次衝突)

    There are many tips for building relationships with people.

    (treating也可以當作治療或其他意思,我覺得改成building relationships文義更清楚)

    Let others know we are kind people.

    (我覺得這句蠻中式英文的,可以說Show your kindness to others 比較像老外的表達邏輯)

    When running into classmates or friends on the way home, do not forget to greet them with an amiable smile.

    (While改成when,因為"碰到"朋友算是一瞬間發生的事情,並沒有持續一直遇到。meet是有事先約好碰面的感覺,改成run into比較符合巧遇的情況。然後在way前面加上the、forget 跟greet中間加上to)

    The more emphasis is put on other people’s opinions or ideas, the more likely our words will be respected in return. If any collision happens, stay calm and communicate with patience rather than adopting physical or verbal violence. Getting along with everyone is not easy to achieve, yet it is worth taking our efforts to do so. (有幾個文法錯誤跟語感較不通順的地方)

    參考資料: 用外語作文不容易,加油喔!
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