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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 6 年前

急需幫忙修改這篇英文演講稿

主題是一篇新聞

Taiwan's most popular animal star 圓仔,from the moment of birth,has become the focus of national attention,it efforts to learn to crawl and walk of cute appearance,melting the hearts of legions of fans,圓仔's birth,give us more joy and make life more interesting,see how 圓仔 to set off lovely cyclone,birth on evening of July 6 2013 ,baby Panda 圓仔 was born, just a one month old of 圓仔, growing up slowly in the incubator,body weight had increased to 1000 grams,106 days 圓仔 began learning to walk,has now become the fat Panda,after one month,not only walking can also play,then began climbing tree,now 圓仔 bring everyone's blessing,ready to meet everyone on January 6,in front of everyone want to show the cute look

請幫忙修該一下有奇怪的地方或需要修改的請改好之後回答,大概要講2分半鐘請問這長度夠嗎??還是要在加

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假如需要加長大概要加多長呢??

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  • 6 年前
    最佳解答

    原文已修正如下,因原文長度以一般的速度,最多可持續約1分鐘,說得慢些也只有1分多鐘,因此我於最後加寫一些內容,如內容不符您的需求,請自行撰寫,有錯誤請提出,因原文短,您在演講時,應放慢速度,運用語調,慢慢講出。講得太快,怕半分鐘內會結束。

    Taiwan's the most popular animal star is 圓仔, from the moment of the birth, it had become the focus of national attentions, it made efforts to learn to crawling and walking to with cute appearance, melting the hearts of legions of fans. 圓仔's Its birth gave us more joys and made our lives more interesting to see how did圓仔 to set off the lovely cyclone? birth On the evening of July 6, 2013, baby Panda 圓仔, the baby panda, was born, just a one month old, of 圓仔 it was sent to growing up slowly in the a incubator, its body weight had increased to 1000 grams, when 106 days, 圓仔 it began learning to walk, has and now become the a fat Panda, moreover, after one month further, it could not only walking can but also play, then began climbing tree. Now 圓仔 brings everyone's people’s blessings and ready to meet everyone the visitors on January 6, in front of everyone the audience, it wants to show the cute look that it was born with. 圓仔 is a cute and healthy panda now, it is playing in the nursing room every day, and at this stage, it begins to learn how to live as a real young one from its mother, especially to eat the food of an adult panda, 圓仔is naughty enough to steal bamboos or carrots from mother to try to taste them. It is so cute and fun like an angel from Heaven, we love it much and hope that it will grow up to become a strong and beautiful girl panda.

    2014-04-11 11:37:22 補充:

    而前二段的內容已是過去的,故下段文字的時態,須修正如下:

    January 6, 圓仔 brought people’s blessings and readied to meet the visitors, in front of the audience, it wanted to show the cute look that it was born with.

  • 匿名使用者
    6 年前

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