W 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 6 年前

英文作文(很急20點)

My mother 1.educates(教育) me is very free like how many score did i get ,

she never scoid(責罵)me.

Once a time , I did't wnt to go to school and treated her unpolite (不禮貌)she did't say anything but also drave me on the school .

On that time,I had a bad grade(成績) on the big exam but mom didn't tell me anything rather(反而)want me just be happy.

This memory let me know whether I am a good kid or not ,she still love me never change ,and I want to let her know she is the best mom in my heart.

這篇作文採主題式作文 my mother 作為主題

老師給的評語是此偏多為中式英文寫法

1.幫我看看單字動詞名詞哪裡不對

2.逗號 哪裡該都哪裡不用豆 (要原因)

3. 是否有人稱需要是大寫的 例如mom

很急 !!!謝謝

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  • 6 年前
    最佳解答

    改正版本

    My mother educates(教育) me very free. For example she doesn't care so much how many scores that I can get. She never blames (責罵)me.

    註解1: educates 是動詞,而 is = verb to be 等於重複了2: "like how many score did I get"☞ 中式英語3: scoid (x) ☞ blame

    Once a time , I didn't want to go to the school and treated her

    impolitely.(不禮貌) She didn't say anything but also drove me to the

    school .

    註解: treated是動詞, "形容動詞要用副詞" impolitely

    At that time,I had got a worse result( 成績) on the main examinations, but Mummy didn't complain me anything, she would rather(反而)want me just to be happy.

    註解:grade 等級、級別 result 成績

    On that time (x) ☞ At that time

    This memory let me wonder whether I am a good kid or not ,she still

    loves me never change ,and I want to let her know she is the best

    Mother in my mind.

    註解1: know= 知道了,wonder whether= 置疑是否2:did't (x) ☞ didn't

    2. In my mind ☞比較 in my heart 通順些

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    My mother 1.educates(教育) me is very free like how many score did I get ,she never scoid(責罵)me.

    Once a time , I did't wnt to go to school and treated her unpolite (不禮貌)she did't say anything but also drave me on the school .

    On that time,I had a bad grade(成績) on the big exam but mom didn't

    tell me anything rather(反而)want me just be happy.

    This memory let me know whether I am a good kid or not ,she still

    love me never change ,and I want to let her know she is the best mom in my heart.

    P.S. 請注意底線錯誤部份

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    參考資料: Yoyo
  • 6 年前

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    6 年前

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  • 6 年前

    怕改得太多 老師覺得怪

    初學語文有錯很正常

    句首都是大寫, 除 我 和名字 等專有名詞其他並沒有必要維持大寫

    My mother educates me freely(adv), like no matter how much of the score i got, she would never scold me for that.

    Once I didn't want to go to school and being impolite to her, she didn't say anything and drove me to the school.

    When I got a bad grade of a big exam, she said nothing and simply wanted me to be happy.

    These(複數 你上面舉了兩個例子) memories make me realise(理解/領悟 know 是指知道) whether I am a good kid or not, she will still love me,(never change 多餘的) and I want to let her know she is the best mom in my heart.

    語句結束或語氣轉折就用逗號

    你寫中式英文我覺得很正常, 不過那是老師的問題 我就不多說了

    參考資料: meh
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