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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 6 年前

考過全民英檢中高級的高手請幫我看看!

這幾天要去面試了!可是英文自傳一直不知道對不對,麻翻高手幫我看看!感恩!

My name is XXX, I was graduated from information management department, I got recommended by all my graduation project's crew to be a team leader.

It was a extreme challenged job, but after all still live up to expectations so that we can successfully graduated.

I had a experience to go abroad to study for two years, Brisbane and Melbourne in Australia.

My parents gave me a great opportunity to learn and cultivate my second language, therefore It became my proud specialty than any comrade in the college time.

Nowadays are trying to obtain a cook license, also improving my English skills, hoping to towards the restaurant or tutoring English in the future.

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麻煩看看有沒有拼錯字或語意不順和語法錯誤等,謝謝

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非常謝謝各位高手!

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  • 最佳解答

    You used too many "I" in a sentence.

    My name is xxxx, graduated from information management department. I was nominated as a team leader for my graudation project. My team managed very challenging tasks ( what was your project about? say something here about your project); however, we did live up to the expections of my professors so that we were all able to graduate without any problems.

    After graduation, I was fortunate enough to be able to study in Brisbane and Melbourne in Australia for two years. My parents have offered me a great opportunity to study English since I was little. My ability to communicate effectively in English had made me so proud among my college peers during my college years in Taiwan.

    Lately I have been trying to obtain a chef license while studying really hard to improve my English skills. My wishes are either to open a restuarant or to become an English tutor in the future

    2014-09-18 16:53:46 補充:

    . <-- "add a period (.) at the end of my last paragraph"

    Change 參考資料: Live in USA --> 參考資料: Live in the USA

    參考資料: Live in USA, Live in the USA. XD
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  • 呆子
    Lv 7
    6 年前

    My name is XXX and I graduated from information management department of XXX university .I, a leader, was elected by my graduation project's team. It was extremely challengeable, but we finally graduated beyond the expectation.

    I went abroad and studied for two years at Brisbane and Melbourne in Australia.

    It was a great opportunity to practice my second language.

    Nowadays I am working hard to obtain a cook’s license, improving my English skills, hoping to service at the restaurant in the future.

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  • 6 年前

    My name is XXX, I was graduated from information management department of a college, I got had been recommended by all my graduation project's crew to be a the team leader, it was an extremely challenging job, but after all at last, we still lived up to the expectations so that we can and successfully graduated.

    I had the experience to go abroad to of studying abroad for two years, at Brisbane and Melbourne, in Australia.

    Because my parents had given me a great opportunity to learn and cultivate my second language, therefore It which became my proud specialty than any comrade in the college time.

    Nowadays I am are trying to obtain a cook license, also and improve my English skills, hoping to towards the run a restaurant or be an tutoring English tutor in the future.

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