匿名使用者
匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 6 年前

急!請幫我看看我這封英文Mail寫得對不對,如何更有禮貌?

這封Mail是我要寫給陳老師的先生(他是外國人),我都尊稱他為××叔叔。

請幫我看看文法哪裡不對,以及如何更有禮貌些,謝謝。

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××叔叔您好,我是××,

我已經幫陳老師找到她想要的這首歌,這首歌的名字是「××××」

請連結至我的Google雲端硬碟(此音樂在"Music"資料夾中),

並幫她存至她的iPhone中,謝謝!

如果方便的話,"Music>Other Music"中的音樂也順便存進去,

也許陳老師也會喜歡。

1. Hello, uncle ××, I am ××.

2. I has found a song for Ms. Chen,

3. the song's name is: ××××

4. please link to my google drive

5. (the song is saved the " Music " folder),

6. and download it to her iPhone, thanks!

7. PS: If it's convenient for you, ......I think she will be like these songs.

請幫我看看哪裡不大正確,目前我已知的問題為:

2. 我想強調這是陳老師要的,該怎麼修改這句子?

3. 要用this還是the?

4. 這句話沒有主詞可以嗎?

5. 覺得有點怪怪的。

7. 這句不大會翻。

6 個解答

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  • 6 年前
    最佳解答

    ××叔叔您好,我是××,

    我已經幫陳老師找到她想要的這首歌,這首歌的名字是「××××」

    請連結至我的Google雲端硬碟(此音樂在"Music"資料夾中),

    並幫她存至她的iPhone中,謝謝!

    如果方便的話,"Music>Other Music"中的音樂也順便存進去,

    也許陳老師也會喜歡。

    寫得不錯了! 若要強調"....的"可用關代, 兩句之間也可善加利用連接詞or分構 幫你改了一下:

    Dear Uncle XX , (書信開頭通常都用Dear....,)

    I've (alreday) found a song ( Ms. Chen wants ),(which is) called "xxxxx". Please link to my Google Drive (The song is in the "Music" folder), and download it to her iPhone,thanks!

    By the way, if it's convenient for you, could you download the other documentaries in the "Other Music" folder? Perhaps she would like it.

    Sincerely,

    ___(你的名字)

    2. 用關代~ 但其實沒甚麼差啦~意思有到就好

    3. the-特定的 this-這個 其實都可以啦~ 除非你很強調"這一首"歌

    4.可以啊~ 祈使句

    Ex; (Please) stand up.

    Close the windows.

    5. ok的啦~

    2014-11-24 22:29:40 補充:

    Victor 大師強阿!!!!

    甘拜下風.!

    2014-11-24 23:18:01 補充:

    同意V大. P大所說的:

    用 Mr. _(姓)___喔

    參考資料: 自己喔^_^
  • 6 年前

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    TS777。CC

  • 6 年前

    My recommendation:

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    Dear xx, (不一定需加 Uncle, 因你稱陳老師 Ms. Chen)

    This is xx. Hope all is well!

    I have found the song (xxxx.mp3) Ms. Chen was looking for and saved it in

    my Google Drive (under "Music" directory). Please help her retrieve it and

    load to her iPhone. In fact you may just retrieve all files under "Music > Other

    Music" directory as I am sure Ms. Chen may like some of these songs as

    well.

    Please don't hesitate to let me know in case you encounter any problem.

    Warm Regards,

    xx

  • 6 年前

    建議修改如下, 謹供參考!

    1. Hello, Uncle X××. It's me, Xxx.

    2. I has found a song for Ms. Chen,

    3. the name of the song is, Xxxx.

    4. Please clink into the link of my Google driver as below.

    5. (The song is saved in the " Music folder").

    6. Just download it and send to her iPhone, thanks!

    7. P.S. If it's convenient for you, I suppose she will like this song.

    2014-11-25 15:56:47 補充:

    修改如下:

    Dear Uncle Xxx,

    1. Hello, it's me, Xxx.

    參考資料: Yoyo
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  • 6 年前

    第一行就超怪的.

    1.阿美人 不愛 攀親拉戚的 她真是妳的 叔叔還會不知道妳是神啊?

    2.若不是妳叔叔 真是不應該 醬叫.

    2014-11-24 22:46:00 補充:

    3. 若是是真的 叔叔,妳應該自稱 "This is Princess returning your email."

    2014-11-25 00:09:53 補充:

    4. 稱呼老師 Ms. Chen應該是 OK的!

  • 匿名使用者
    6 年前

    Dear Uncle xx,

    I'm xx, and I have found the song that Ms. Chen wanted. The name of the song is "xxxx". Please go to my Google drive (the song is in the "Music" folder) and download it to her iPhone for her. Thank you!

    2014-11-24 21:36:56 補充:

    P.S. If it's convenient for you, save the music inside "Music>Other Music" as well. I think she'll like them too.

    2014-11-24 21:42:25 補充:

    1. 通常Mr. Chen應該就可以了,看你自己習慣

    2. 子句 "... that Ms. Chen wanted",song改用定冠詞強調不只是任何一首歌

    3. 沒太大差別,不過我會習慣把"名字"放"歌"前面

    4. 祈使句主詞是you不過都直接省略,沒問題

    5. 少了in當作表示地方或位置的介系詞

    2014-11-24 22:24:28 補充:

    對了,陳老師尊稱應該用Mrs.才對,因為她已婚了

    2014-11-24 22:27:39 補充:

    然後我剛剛眼殘沒看到陳老師的先生是外國人,他八成不姓陳...所以Mr. Chen那個就別理我,用Uncle xx吧(除非你知道他的姓氏)

    2014-11-24 23:13:38 補充:

    P大這麼一講我才想起來,外國人沒有在互相叫叔叔阿姨的(真的姓名都不知道也頂多是Sir/Madam而已),所以你還是用Mr. xx吧(xx是他的姓氏,注意一下)

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