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急!!! 請幫改英文自傳

請幫改英文自傳!!! 因為有點急 ,

希望有好心人可以幫我修改一下 嗚嗚嗚

請不要用google翻譯 或其他翻譯網 謝謝 , 感恩

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Dear Sir/Madam:

My name isXXX. I am a 24 year old that comes from Kaohsiung who graduated from the XXXX University and my major was in Japanese. My character is strongly influenced by the environment in which I grew up. Parents are open-minded to our education, culture and lively optimistic me, adaptable personality, but also educate my independent and responsible attitude,This has brought much responsibility on my shoulders, and I have made me an independent person fairly early in life. In addition to these tries, I am a fast learner, I love making friends and trying out new things, and can easily adapt to unexpected situations. contact with many teachers and students from different countries, so I have a solid basic language skills and global perspective, not afraid to communicate with foreigners

After entering the university. I joined the Student Organization, from a member to director of activities section. I realized that it was very difficult to manage a school club. One thing that I remember most is in my junior year when the school held a contest of Club Characteristics. As the director of activities section at that time , I was under a lot of pressure, such as taking care of my school work, finding time to practice, designing movements. and sometimes relieving the members of their emotional stress. One problem came after another and I had to solve them one by one. But in the end we won the second place with the effort from everybody and felt all that hard work was worth it. I also found out that I was quite good at resisting pressure. I think it is perhaps beacause of the idea that my parents have given to me from childhood. It made me think that the sense of responsibility is the most important. and it is the sense of responsibility that keeps me growing and learning constantly, too.

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After graduation I worked in cram school class teacher, trained me to take care of

observant students from various backgrounds, can warm and friendly, quick to actively provide students and parents satisfied with the service.

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  • 6 年前
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    Dear Sir/Madam:

    My name isXXX. I am 24 years old and from Kaohsiung. I graduated from the XXXX University; my major was Japanese. My personality is strongly influenced by the environment where I grew up. My parents have good sense of my education; they are very optimistic. Yet, they still want me to be independent and responsible. As a result, I became a person that my parents expected. In addition, I learned quickly; I loved to make friends and learned something new. The reason is that I can easily adapt to the new environment. To demonstrate, I can communicate with many teachers and students from different countries. All of these are on account of my language skills and global perspective.

    自己修改的 不是專業 可能還是有些grammar mistakes 給你參考

    2015-06-16 00:16:04 補充:

    When I was a university student, I joined the Student Organisation from a member to director of activities section. At that time, I realized that it was very difficult to manage a school club. Besides, I can still remember that in my junior year, the school held a contest of Club Characteristics, th

    2015-06-16 00:17:06 補充:

    e director of activities section. At that time, I was stressful owing to taking care of my school work, practicing and designing movements. Furthermore, another problem was that I had to solve them one by one; fortunately, we won the second place and felt that all we have paid were worth it. Also, I

    2015-06-16 00:17:34 補充:

    found out that I was quite good at resisting pressure. The reason might due to some suggestions from my parents. Hence, I utterly believe that responsibility is the most important thing that I should notice.

    2015-06-16 00:21:56 補充:

    After graduation, I worked in cram school class to be a teacher. This job trained me to be observant. I could know what students were thinking about and make them an their parents satisfied. Besides, I became warm and friendly.

    2015-06-16 00:25:42 補充:

    其實我覺得你的writing有點redundant跟wordy 有些interrupt用法不太對 跟ㄧ些run-on sentence和文意上的問題 自傳的話段落建議分清楚ㄧ點 結尾段不要結束的太突然

    當然這是我自己修改的 不是專業 可能還是有些grammar mistakes 給你參考而已

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