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我是這麼寫的(結尾大概20~30字左右即可)

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題目: Children Should Play Online Games

第一段: Most parents don't let their children play online games. They think that if their children play online games, they will be stupid. However, I don't think so. I believe that children should play online games.

第二段: When my brother was four, he hadn't seen or played any online games. One day, a doctor told my mom that it is still important to play online games, because children have to learn how to communicate with others. Also, playing online games could teach children to be cooperative, and how to analyze which character is better. Furthermore, games like CS could also teach them concept of space, or the prevention of danger.

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已更新項目:

:小孩可以玩線上遊戲

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  • 4 年前
    最佳解答

    第一段: Most parents don't let their children play online games. They think if children play online games, they will become stupid. However, I believe everything has cons and pros so does play online games. I think playing online games do help children exercising brand.

    第二段: Here is a story of my brother. He didn't play any online games before 5. One day, a doctor told my mom that it is important to let children play online games because it can help them develop communication skills. Also, it could teach children to be cooperative, and to analyze characters is better under the different situation which is analyzation skills. Furthermore, games like CS could also build them a concept of space, or the prevention of danger.

    結尾: Therefore, I believe online games could be played by young children if it's under right way.

    我沒有寫得很多,因為我認為代寫是不好的行為,但有修比較多,我沒有寫很難,應該不會太明顯吧!

    將來有急需英文修改,可以使用wordvice.com.tw喔! 我都是用這個平台學習的!!

    參考資料: 自己
    • > 我沒有寫得很多,因為我認為代寫是不好的行為,...,應該不會太明顯吧!




      超噁的!好口是心非啊!

  • SC147
    Lv 6
    4 年前

    Your 1st & 2nd paragraghs are actually quite well written.

    A few amendments/corrections are spotted, listed as below :

    『第一段: ...... They think that children playing online games is just a waste of time and this will affect their studies. ...

    .......

    第二段: ...... One day, a doctor told my mom that it would be helpful for children to play online games, ...... Also, playing online games would teach children to be cooperative, ...... Furthermore, games like CS would also teach them ...... 』

    結尾:

    All in all, children can really gain a lot of knowledge as well as skills from online games. So, l deeply believe that "children should play online games" during their spare time !

  • 4 年前

    Play online games didn't mean we are stupid,sometimes we learn lots of things from online games.So don't even tell your kids to stop playing online games!

    很爛的話請多包含

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