Sheng宇 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 3 年前

請教各位英文高手幫忙英文自傳修改?

麻煩英文高手幫忙看看文法哪邊可以更改得更好,能流暢一點 感謝!!

My name is Peter Hong who was born in Tainan City. My parents educated me to be an independent person .They also value it that children should be polite to people.

I graduated from the Department of Computer and Communication of Kun Shan University.At schoole,I have learned professions skills in computer.After serving in the army,I worked for one year as an attendant at the Wowprime in Taichung, through this position,let me learn how to interact with customers and provided excellent customer service.Besides,I also worked in department store as a sales associate,this work experience,not only trained my problem solving ability,

but also enhanced my professional knowledge about brand and sales techniques.

My friends tell me that i am a person who is optimistic and amiable.I have excellent people skills.i get along with almost everyone and i have no trouble getting to know new friends. From my viewpoint , it is important to treat everyone sincerely beacuse I also felt happy when I saw them smile with content.

That's the reason why I ike to serve people. In my free time , i like jogging,swimming or going to the gym. Regular exercise not only benefit every part of my body but also release my stress. About planning fot the ture,enhancing my language ability is the focus of my study. I hope my positive attitude will have the opportunity to work for your company. Thank you for your patience.I look forward to hearing from you again.

1 個解答

評分
  • 3 年前
    最佳解答

    Errors and corrections are given in brackets(---):-

    My name is Peter Hong who was born in Tainan city. My parents educated me to be an independent person. They also value it that children should be polite to people.

    I graduated from the Dept of Computer&Communication of Kun Shan University. At school(-),I have learnt (professional skills) in computer. After serving in the army, I worked for one year as an attendant at the Wowprime in Taichung. (This position has let me learn) how to interact with customers&provides excellent customer services. Besides, I also worked in department store as a sales associate.This working experience not only trained my problem solving ability,but also enchanced my professional knowledge about brand&sales techniques.

    My friends tell me that I am a person who is optimistic&amiable. I have excellent (social) skill. I get along with almost everyone& I have no trouble getting to know new friends. From my view point,it is important to treat everyone sincerely because I also felt happy when I saw them smile (to their hearts' content.)(That's the reason why I like to serve people).

    In my free time, I like jogging, swimming or going to the gym. Regular exercise(s) not only benefit every part of my body but also release my stress.

    (The focus of my studies is to enchance my language&communication ability for the planning of my future).I hope my positive attitude will have the opportunity to work for your Co. Thanks for your time& patience. Looking forward to hearing from you.

還有問題?馬上發問,尋求解答。