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匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 3 年前

想請厲害的大大幫我看看 這英文短文有沒有錯誤:)謝謝! 這是要用在presentation的?

Good morning, today I gonna to talk about my biggest secret.

Did you want to die at a moment before?

My first time wanted to die when my mom made me eat vegetables when I was 9 years old.

I didn't like the smell of a lots vegetables, like a pumpkin or an onion.

Now I can eat them with think alive, without dead.

Then, I second time to thought about this when I was 13 years old.

I didn't like to go to school at that moment, there are a lot of reasons, one of them was the classmate sat next to me started to thought about to die and always shared his feelings with me. After that, I began to hated her gradually!

I wanted to talk her, if you was really wanted to die, didn't just hurt your wrist, you should did that with hot water!

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  • Simon
    Lv 5
    3 年前
    最佳解答

    錯誤不少,內容也怪,試試看重寫一篇吧

    Good morning, today I’m('m 不可省略) gonna (to 要拿掉) talk about my biggest secret.

    Did you ever(曾經) want to die(at a moment before 沒意義)?

    The first time I wanted to die when my mom made me eat vegetables that I detested(非常不喜歡) to eat when I was 9 years old.

    I didn't like the smells of some vegetables, like pumpkin or onion

    Now, I can eat these vegetables without any reluctance(可別亂用without dead,dead當名詞時就是死人. reluctance是勉強,without any reluctance意即可接受).

    The second time I thought to die when I was 13 years old.

    I didn't like to go to school at that time, one of the reasons was that one of my classmates sitting next to me often shared his feelings that she wanted to die. And that was the time I began to dislike(dislike 與hate相比,強度低很多) her(副詞gradually實在看不出有何需要).

    At that time, I really wanted to tell her, “if you really want to die, … 之下語意不清,需重寫”

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