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求職信-求幫忙修正英文文法?

I am Jacky Tin. I am writing this letter is to express my interest in applying the position of Financial Officer. I have worked for 3 years as Assistent Officer in Credit Management field with XXX Conpany. I am currently working as Officer in Treasury in YYY company. I am undertaking a CILT and target to be completed in the first half of 2018. I believe that I am a competitive candidate for this position.

I can be reached via the following:

下略…

求幫忙修正文法,或優化一些字眼

另外當填求職表格,推薦人一欄,問關係人關係(relationship),以下情況我應怎樣填?

Terry是我以前同事,但已離開了我過往的公司去到新的公司(YYY company)工作。

我還可以寫former colleague嗎?會讓人以為我是曾在YYY company工作過嗎?

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  • YIP
    Lv 7
    3 年前
    最佳解答

    I am Jacky Tin and would like to apply for the post of Financial Officer in your company. I have worked for 3 years as Assistant Officer in Credit Management Department in XXX Company and currently, I have been working as Officer in Treasury of YYY company and more than that undertaking a CILT and targeted to be completed in the first half of 2018..So, I believe that I will be qualified for this post. In addition, a testimonial is enclosed for my reference.

    I can be reached via the following: Address or telephone. Yip

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  • 3 年前

    括符內文字為修正處

    I am Jacky Tin. I am writing this letter to (apply for) the position of ( f)inancial (o)fficer (of your company). I (had been) worked for 3 years as (an) (a)ssist(a)nt (o)fficer in (the) Credit Management field (of) XXX Co(m)pany. (Currently,) I am working as (an) (o)fficer (for the) Treasury (of) YYY (C)ompany (and) I am undertaking a CILT(now,)( which is targeted) to be completed in the first half of 2018. I believe that I am (an exactly capable and qualified) candidate for this position.

    I can be reached via the following:

    (I can be reached at 地址、信箱或電話)

    a former colleague at XXX Company(曾共事過之公司名稱)

    Terry who was a former colleague (of mine此兩字可省略) at XXX Company

    或Terry, a former colleague at XXX Company

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  • 3 年前

    I am Jacky Tin . I am writing this letter (--)to express my interest in applying the position of Financial Officer.I have worked for 3 years as Assistant Officer in Credit Management field in XXX Company. I am currently working as an Officer in Treasury in YYY Company, undertaking a CILT targeted to be completed in the first half 2018.I believe I am a competent,authorative candidate to do what is needed for this position (----).

    (My former colleague,Terry,who works in YYY Company,has kindly consented, to be my referee for excellent references)

    I can be reached via the following business address.....

    Relationship:----"My former colleague at XXX company,Terry,has kindly accepted to be my referee for reference"

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