羽芯 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 2 年前

~急~請幫忙改一下以下的文章,有中英對照,改英文的就好了,謝謝?

小女孩眼睜睜的看著奶奶離她越來越遠,然後消失在盡頭,兩個黑衣人出現,手上各拿著一把刀,小女孩想要逃跑,卻發現她的身子無法移動,黑衣人開始往她的身上砍,本來以為死後就不會有痛覺的她,發現血從她的全身流出,痛覺不斷從她身上竄流。

小女孩想要放聲哀嚎,但是她痛得說不出話,突然,一個身影出現在她面前。

是父親!小女孩用求救的眼神看著父親,但黑暗遮住了父親的臉,小女孩突然瞥見父親身上也拿著一把刀,小女孩垂下目光,只見父親越來越靠近她,舉起刀子,朝她的心臟一砍……

The little girl watched the grandmother farther and farther away from her, and then disappeared at the end, two black people appear, holding a knife in his hand, the little girl want to escape, but found her body can not move, black people began to cut her body, had thought that after death will not have pain, she found the blood out of her body, the pain constantly flow from her body flow.The little girl wanted to whine, but she could not speak, suddenly, a figure appeared in front of her.Is my father! The little girl with the eyes of distress looked at his father, but the dark cover his father's face, the little girl suddenly caught a glimpse of his father who also took a knife, the little girl hanging eyes, saw his father more and more close to her, raised Knife, toward her heart a cut ... ...

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  • Simon
    Lv 5
    2 年前
    最佳解答

    1. 時態要一致

    2. 句子要分段,注意(學正確)標點符號用法,很多地方需用連接詞

    3. 某些字義要了解清楚,如whine/wail, hang/droop, cut/stab, etc.

    4. 敢寫畢竟值得鼓勵

    The little girl watched (the ==> her) grandmother (leaving) farther and farther away from her, and (then ==> finally) disappeared at the end (of the road). (Then) two black people (appear ==>  appeared), (each ) holding a knife in (his ==>their) (hand ==> hands) ; (at that moment) the little girl (want ==> wanted to) escape, but only found her (body ==> whole body) (can’t move  numb). (This two) black people began to (cut  stab) her body. (had == > She) thought (that after death will not have pain ==> that she would die immediately without pain), (but in a short time) she found the blood out of her body (, ==> with) the pain constantly flow (from ==> through ) her (body flow ==> body). The little girl began to (whine ==> wail), but she could not (speak ==>  utter sounds); suddenly a figure appeared in front of her (. Is my father! ==> and It’s her father!) The little girl (with the eyes of distress looked at his father ==> watched his father with distressful eyes), but the (dark ==> darkness) (cover ==>  covered) his father's face. The little girl suddenly caught a glimpse of (his father taking a knife ==>

    his father having a knife in his hand); the little girl (hanging ==> droop her ) eyes, (saw ==> but still saw) his father (move) more and more close to her, raised the knife, (toward her heart a cut ==>

    stabbed toward her heart) ... ...

  • 2 年前

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    英文沒有學好,不管出國或工作上面真的會到處碰壁

    《分享一個我自己的例子》

    我在求學時期就沒有把英文學好,出了社會在工作上升遷總是與我擦身而過

    甚至連自己1個人出國,都因為英文不好,而在機場困住1個多小時才出去

    所以讓我下定決心想要把英文學好,就去報名了傳統的英文補習班

    雖然精挑細選了小班制的教學,可是班上同學的程度普遍都比我好太多了

    時間久了因為程度跟不太上,舊的內容還沒消化,新的當然也來不及吸收

    加上常常下了班就匆匆忙忙的趕去上課,有時候甚至加班無法去上課

    就這樣有一堂沒一堂的缺課,進度落後加上趕車,最後舟車勞頓太累自我放棄

    所以後來真心體會到,學習任何的語言不外乎就是要有「恆心+毅力」

    既然這樣的方式沒辦法長時間堅持學習下去,那就另外找適合的方法

    因為我朋友也跟我有同樣的情況,英文不好在工作上一直有阻礙

    後來他選擇了現在很流行的線上學英文來幫助他自己提升英文程度

    優點是不用花太多的時間通勤來回跑補習班,反而多了更多時間練習英文

    我也是後來聽他開口說英文而嚇到,沒想到會進步的這麼迅速

    而且變的很敢開口說英文,我覺得大部份的人都敗在不敢開口說英文

    這真的是最大的突破跟進步!

    所以我就特別花了點時間,研究不用跑補習班就可以學好英文的方法

    如果你也想提升自己的英文程度,來應付你工作上、求學上或者娛樂上需求

    我把自己整理好的資訊分享出來,希望對你也有幫助

    下面幾個都是不用去補習班,就可以在家學英文的方法

    那要怎麼找到適合自己的老師呢?我強烈建議每一家都去試聽一下

    因為每個老師的教法都不同,真的要實際聽過才會知道適不適合自己

    當然我找的這幾家,也都一定要讓我能免費試聽,而且是在家就可以試聽

    只要線上填寫資料,就可以讓你在家用電腦就能免費試聽

    所以建議每一家都填表試聽看看 (真的不收費喔)

    因為通常有比較之下,才會發現哪個老師,哪個方法更適合自己

    這樣也是幫助自己學習起來更容易吸收的方式

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