小新 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 2 年前

有關自我介紹的英文翻譯(急!)~幫忙確認是我翻譯的是否正確?

如題, 請英文好的大大幫忙確認我翻譯的英文是否正確, 或者有更好的敘述方式, thanks~

家裡有7人, 有爸媽, 兩位哥哥, 老婆,小孩跟我,

2009年6月畢業於真理大學, 工業管理與經營資訊學系,

2010/8月退伍, 9月開始工作,

目前工作經歷滿6年,

外派越南經歷共3年, 去年3/31因為被資遣而結束工作,

上一個工作是製程副課長, 主要工作內容是進行製程改善並提升良率,

審核圖面及設計治工具, 以使產線順利生產,

去年有參加職訓半年, 主要是學習機械製圖跟傳統車銑床操作,

並於今年1/25結訓,

未來是希望能夠進入研發這塊領域

There are seven members in my family,including my parents, 2brothers , wife, son and me,

I graduated from the Department of Iudustrial Management & Enterprise Information of ALETHEIA University in Sep.2009,

Then I have finished military service in Aug. 2010 and started to work in Sep. 2010

The working experience that I have six years,

I started to work in Hanoi 3 Years, and last year I had finished this work because was fired on Mar. 31,

The previous working position was in Process Deputy section manager , the groundwork content for pushing the process improving and enhance yield,

Check graphic and design the tool for product line can operate smoothly,

Last year I have took part in job training, the job training content for learning mechanical drawing and operating Conventional Manual Lathe and Miller,

and have finished the job training at Jan. 25

I think about my future is that can get into the area of the research and development

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剛自己發現一個錯誤XD,

Then I have finished military service in Aug. 2010 and started to work in Sep. 2010

->Then I have finished military service in Aug. 2010 and started to work in Jun. 2010

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  • 2 年前
    最佳解答

    There are seven members in my family, inluding my parents, two brothers, wife, son and me.

    I graduated from the Department of Industrial Management & Enterprise Information of ALETHEIA University in Sept.2009.

    Then I have finished military service in Aug.2010 and started to work in (June)2010 (for six years with working experience)

    I started to work in Hanoi for three years and had finished (and dismissed) the work last year.

    The previous working position was in Process Deputy Section manager; the ground work contents were mainly for pushing the process-improving & enchancing the yield, and to check graphic&design tool for production line(no can but to) to operate smoothly.

    Last year I have (taken) part in job training (no content but on) on mechanical drawing & operating Conventional Manual Lathe and Miller, and have finished the job training (preposition on not at) on Jan. 25.

    (As for my future prospect), I hope I can get into the area of reaseach and development.

    • TOMING88
      Lv 7
      2 年前檢舉

      The simple past denotes action has begun and completed in the past=finished

  • YIP
    Lv 7
    2 年前

    There are seven family members,of which consist my parents, 2 brother, my wife, my son and myself,

    I was graduated from Department of Industrial Management & Enterprise Information in ALETHEIA University in Sep.2009,

    And after that, I had completed military training in Aug. 2010 and started to work in Jun. 2010. Until now, I have six years' working experience, which were detailed as follows:I started to work in Sep. 2010 at Hanoi, Vietnam about 3 Years, and last year I had been laid off by that employer on Mar. 31, As to my previous working position was being working as Process Deputy section manager , the groundwork content for pushing the process improving and enhance yield, Check graphic and design the tool for product line so as to operate smoothly. Last year I have been taken part in job training, which were containing or learning mechanical drawing and operating Conventional Manual Lathe and Miller, and have finished the job training on Jan. 25. I think about my future is that can get into the field of the research and development Yip

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    • Duncan2 年前檢舉

      Use simple past tense for all sentences with time reference, such as Mar 31, last year and Jan 25.

  • 2 年前

    Thank you for solving my problem

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