匿名使用者
匿名使用者 發問時間: 社會與文化語言 · 2 年前

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Stay good shape and keep moderate weigh is proper for everyone.If we used right approach to lose weigh,we wold have a healthy body and wonderful mind.

There is some ways to losing weigh,it may distrube physical clock,go to bed before eleven p.m.Second,drink more water and eat more vegetable instead of eating meat,thrid,exercise minutes every day.

Healthy way can reach the purpose and avoid letting our body sick.Losing weigh should use right way and positive mind.That is, we can easily control ourselves to reach the purpose.

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  • YIP
    Lv 7
    2 年前
    最佳解答

    To stay good shape and keep fit are proper things for everyone.If we used right approach to keep fit then would have a healthy body and a sound mind. There are some ways to keep fit, firstly by keeping the normal routine daily habits; secondly, by eating more vegetables instead of meat; thirdly, by doing exercise at least half an hour every day. Because of that healthy ways which can prevent you from sickness besides healthy body and a sound mind. At last, keep fit should be done in the right way or under the guidance of professionals, so that can easily be done by ourselves to reach such goal. Yip

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  • 2 年前

    In your composition the right approach correspondse with the right way; the different parts which something called idea is made up of; the way in which the different parts are organized; and the arrangement of objects or ideas in the composition are excellent, for the first time it is absolutely excellent.

    Errors and Corrections are in round bracket (parenthesis) when either of a pair of marks are given to you:-

    (To) stay (in) good shape and (to)keep (a) moderate (weight) is proper (worry) for everyone.

    If we used (the) right approach to lose (weight), we would have a healthy body and (a lively, keen ) mind.

    There (are) some ways to losing (weight.)

    (Firstly), it may (be) the (fair distribution=resetting) (of the) physical clock, (by) going to bed before (11 pm).

    (Secondly), try drink more water and eat more vegetables instead of meat.

    (Thirdly), try exercise (30 minutes) every day.

    (A) healthy way can (help) reach the purpose and avoid (worrying about) our body sick.

    (Trying to lose weight=to become less heavy and less fat) should use (the) right way and (a) positive mind.

    As a result, we can easily (boost our confidence) (by watching our weight) to reach our purposes.

  • 匿名使用者
    2 年前

    Staying good shapes and keeping moderate weights are proper for everyone.If we use right approaches to lose weight, we can attain a healthy body and good mind.

    There are some ways to lose weight. For example, resetting our physical clock, going to bed before 11 p.m. Second, we should drink large amount of water and eat more vegetables instead of eating meats. Third, we better exercise at least 30 minutes every day.

    Adopting healthy ways can reach our purposes as well as avoid making our body sick. Methods should be used in the right way in order to lose weight and we should always keep a positive mind. As a result, we can easily boost ourselves to reach our purposes.

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